Legacy Chapter 2
Added 2015-04-29 03:39:01 +0000 UTCIncluded is a WIP for the image for this chapter, featuring 'Raja', the king cheetah character in this story. Enjoy, and feel free to comment! I love getting feedback :)
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Very nice art. love it
Inceton games
2017-03-24 01:04:11 +0000 UTCVery interesting :3
Skie
2015-05-01 09:25:12 +0000 UTCWell this is an interesting new character dynamic. My first thoughts reminded me of Ransom and Puck, but this is wholly different! I'm really curious about Ahsan's mysterious background now - how a member of the Noble caste in this civilization came to be in such a situation (he clearly still has some "hyena privilege" though), and whether or not his pariah status among the other "untouchables" is a racial grudge because he's hyena or something more. There doesn't seem to be the venom associated with a grudge - the other servants don't seem to persecute him like they might if they hated him per se; rather they just avoid him. I'm very excited for more chapters, Rukis! This is the best anthro-themed writing since Redwall!
DiezlWolf
2015-04-30 21:04:51 +0000 UTCSa Kadar in his attempt to get all his fellow workers from his hide got a diminutive shadow as a companion now. And A cheetah with a grudge towards him. To make a wild guess here (and oh how wild that one is if you take into account that this is only chapter 2) this will become a symbiotic relationship between both as Kadar gets meat to rejunivate faster while Ahsan has now someone that truely cares for him and is willing to converse even. Might be interesting to learn what made the hyena do it (guess it may be the overseer Lochan somehow) and as an added bonus Ahsan may be able to read and write so Kadar may be able to learn how to read his contract for once minimizing trickery by the clans. Really wonderful story. Can't wait for the next part.
Rei Loire
2015-04-29 13:30:46 +0000 UTCWow I just adore Ahsan's personality! I can't help but love him. :)
Cosmo
2015-04-29 06:32:47 +0000 UTCLoved this part and the developing characters. One quick thing I noticed on the 2nd page: "When afterwards the ferret had declared the injury to be 'minor', which I contest to this day was an uneducated GUEST." Should it be "was an uneducated guess"? Anywho, great writing and I look forward to more :)
Connor Laleff
2015-04-29 04:46:46 +0000 UTC
