Escapades Issue 4 - Page 17 - Sketch

That's an effective way to plan out the comic: having a general idea of where you want it to start and end, but leaving enough space when it comes visuals and character dialogue. Even if you don't include the "quiet please" scene, I'm sure it'll be a welcome addition to the last three chapters you've created. Thanks for considering the idea either way. And I'm glad you enjoy my comments; it can be difficult to tell when I'm going overboard in terms of looking over the pictures and trying to find the best parts of them (not just the bondage and the gags and the general kinkiness, but stuff like realistic lighting and shading too). Seriously, thank you for that unrelated, but very much appreciated, comment. Took me way too long to respond, I know...

on the job training you say Aer might want to scroll up and see what that would be but it may be hard to use your phone with just your nose.

Mark Johner

Cool, glad you're enjoying it! :D Probably just going to stick with web gags and no edited context (likely remove the drider's text bubbles, and change W&A's to mmphing), but we'll see. Mhm, that's actually something I've considered, or at least something similar - both girls butting in and being told something like "I'm glad you're interested but this will be easier if you just let me tell the story in full, and then we'll take questions after." while gagging them... but again, we'll see. My process is to loosely script out the contents and required story beats for each page, and then when actually drawing it and writing the dialogue I make room for a little improv. So it'll depend on how much page-space I need to make sure I'm not missing any details in Drider's tale, and then if there's any room left to squeeze in a 'be quiet' moment. Also, unrelated, but on another Patreon I follow I saw you mention 'let me know if these long comments are getting annoying', so I'd just like you to know they're incredibly appreciated by myself, and I'm sure all the other artists feel the same way!

Wossa

Holy crow this story seems to be taking a dark turn, and I love it all the more for that. The little character moments are great too, like Aeria questioning the spider lady about feeding them while Wossy just noms some bread. Nice to see the "villain" may have more depth than expected (can't wait to her her story!) I like the idea of the gag alts, especially if you try and tie these alts into the feel of the story. For example, maybe the spider lady uses different gags instead of her webbing (to make better use of the location), having different reactions to each one. Perhaps she remarks that the tape gag is almost as sticky as her own webbing, even applying it sloppily over Wossy and Aeria's mouths the first time. If you're still have difficulty balancing bondage with the story, consider having the spider lady regag Wossy or Aeria at points over the next few pages; I'd think that Aeria would constantly interrupt with questions, forcing the spider lady to regag her and Wossy to translate her friend's further questions in gagspeak.

Oh no!! Shes not a mean after all!! Shes cuuuuuute!!! ♡♡♡♡♡♡

Shio