flebelelele
Added 2016-02-13 14:05:07 +0000 UTCOMG patreon exclusive content ! You get to see the garbage page I won't call ortie 26.
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... this happens.
RodVonBoche
2016-02-13 19:45:57 +0000 UTCCos it's too tightly packed with random close ups which don't make it look important enough - I mean he came, godammit ! You gotta make it awesome. Instead you got a butt, which is just kind of there, then a utilitarian shot of a dick, then the headshot to show the expression and finally the same panel as the one on the previous page. None of it looks intense, not the way the page is set, not what the panels shows. It's just meh. If it was just a page where nothing happened but some plapping it wouldn't be a problem, but there's a bit more to it than that so it's not adequate. Also this is a long fucking paragraph because if I try to jump a line
RodVonBoche
2016-02-13 19:45:48 +0000 UTCWhy not?
Connor Runda
2016-02-13 18:08:01 +0000 UTC
![Jive Faury [SDD Lab]](https://samsuka.com/istorage/43236.jpg)
