A great picture of Snow, and by the looks of things, she's not happy...
I went ahead and redid a lot of this chapter, but not all of it. Mostly the Duke's dialogue. Added some foreshadowing, removed all references to the 2 month time limit.
One day when I'm actually doing deep edits, the rest of this chapter will be touched up I'm sure but for now I'm just focu...
2021-06-14 21:07:25 +0000 UTC
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What changed: a lot.
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We had a short break before the second half of the team meeting. Tensions were high, so Opalina too...
2021-06-14 01:45:01 +0000 UTC
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Chapter 80 rewrite will go live tonight, sorry for delay. This one took longer for whatever reason.
Also for $5 patrons there’s a new Bonus chapter coming up, it’s currently 1500 words and will have Sam and Meri doing a very unique threesome with the GM! I expect the final word to b...
2021-06-14 00:45:13 +0000 UTC
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I don't feel like writing a huge changelog for this one, but as to what changed, a lot? It all follows the same structure, but everything is rewritten and rephrased. Lot of the jokes have been altered to work better, added some new ones, added more foreshadowing to Opal's dialogue, those are the ...
2021-06-12 08:01:33 +0000 UTC
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I'm progressing smoothly with the rewrites. Just taking a while so I apologize for getting it all done back to back like this. 79 was originally 3,000 words and right now I'm at 3,500 and there will still probably be another 2,000 to go. Might be done tonight, we'll see. I want to be done, but th...
2021-06-12 00:47:37 +0000 UTC
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I wanted to get something smaller done after finishing the Fleetfoot chapters. This went a little deeper than I meant it to, but basically I was editing out a mention of the 2 months time limit and fixing canon, but ended up fixing all the grammer, making it sound better and adding about 700 new ...
2021-06-11 04:44:55 +0000 UTC
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Didn't get this done last night because of how long it is. One 2200 word chapter is now 3 chapters at 5700 words. As I mentioned, this one changes... well, pretty much the entire thing. I shall now break down why.
-At the time, I kept on raising the stakes for no damn reason. While Fleetfoo...
2021-06-10 20:22:31 +0000 UTC
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Going to pause new chapters for a few days so I can finish rewriting the Fleetfoot encounter and the team meeting chapters. With those done, I will have fully finished fixing the only part of the story that bugs me to that extent.
It should only take me 2-3 more days, but for my own mental ...
2021-06-09 22:07:05 +0000 UTC
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The rest of the flight to Dawnstead went by fast. I still don’t like flying, but after participating in an all-out air battle, it’s safe to say I’ve experienced the worst of it. Conversation dries up. Both of us want to focus on our thoughts until we can properly sit down, so we don’t put...
2021-06-08 22:34:48 +0000 UTC
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This one took a little bit of extra time since it wasn't in the outline, therefore I didn't plan out what sort of spells would be used and I had to carefully consider how much of the extent of Opal's strength would be shown.
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Opalina stares down the enemy, her wand ready for ...
2021-06-07 21:35:46 +0000 UTC
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I'm looking to do more bonus chapters in the future because I should really beef up the Patreon's amount of exclusive content, and I thought I'd publicly let you guys suggest things. Keep in mind that in no way means I'm going to do any these and I'm looking for prompts that interests me, and I w...
2021-06-06 22:56:47 +0000 UTC
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(Future Kom here. Releasing this bonus chapter to make up for all the lack of actual new chapters. Enjoy.)
I needed a break from working on Ch 209 (mostly done) so I started a little something and ended up with this. I actually mentioned I had an idea for a Peri bonus chapter a long, long t...
2021-06-06 21:10:50 +0000 UTC
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The first volley of magic missiles miss us by a long shot thanks to my evasive swerving, but already the henchmages are preparing a follow-up attack. Opal, her long and curly brunette hair flowing majestically in the wind, doesn’t seem all that impressed. “How dull...” She says, turning up ...
2021-06-05 21:22:40 +0000 UTC
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Because ch 207 was already mostly done, I wanted to move forward with getting more of the necessary rewrites done. This one was so easy I could knock it out in under a day.
What changed? Contradictingly, a lot and very little. Almost the entire chapter is 'the same' in terms of what happens...
2021-06-05 06:41:12 +0000 UTC
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To those of you who read the outline, surprise. Sometimes stuff changes from the outline because I have a much better idea lol.
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I follow after the Doctor as she leads me further away from the building, presumably so that we have plenty of room for take-off. “Just to be clear, yo...
2021-06-04 21:50:05 +0000 UTC
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This is the last part of the conversation with Luxy to be rewritten. It's basically a redo of this chapter, only now it's twice as long and will be split in two.
This is ...
2021-06-04 20:47:56 +0000 UTC
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Before I forget, I tell Opal to wait in the other room for me as I grab a little something for Meri. On top of one of my office’s multiple bookshelves lies a small wooden chest out of view to anyone who doesn’t know to look for it. Inside lies the three choose your own adventure magic novels,...
2021-06-03 18:46:06 +0000 UTC
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Now that she’s ready to unload whatever mental baggage is weighing on her conscience, I step toward Nikita and sit leaning against the arm of the sofa on the opposite side of her. While giving her my best and most reassuring smile, I do what I can to make the Grekkan feel comfortable. “Just g...
2021-06-02 19:45:30 +0000 UTC
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When I was about to upload this chapter to Scribblehub yesterday, I noticed I only had it at around 1400 words. I must've rushed it out back when writing it, and I felt the need to polish it up significantly. Give it a re-read, I improved a lot of the text and added another 600 so words on top of...
2021-06-02 19:38:10 +0000 UTC
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Now alone in my office with only Opal and Nikita for company, I find that the witch holds nothing back. “You smell like you’ve been having sex all morning,” Opal asserts her dominance by strutting ahead of me and sitting on my desk. She adjusts her glasses and crosses her long legs, an amus...
2021-06-01 06:55:21 +0000 UTC
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I changed my mind and am letting all patrons read it, but if you read it you DAMN well better leave me feedback lol. I'll get back to work on actual writing tomorrow.
2021-05-31 09:49:01 +0000 UTC
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