Rewrite Ideas (Full Comic Download)

Part One: The focus of this rewrite is to expand on the relationship between Becky and Jamal, as well as expand on the events that already happened within the first ten pages. The plan is to start with them having sex and trying. Then Becky comes home with the pills, but instead of Jamal having an immediate reaction to them, it’s a slower progression. That way, I can establish his dick and balls size changes adverse the negative effects of memory loss when he’s on them, and the addiction they cause. He will first notice that his sex drive is higher, then that he cums more, and by the end of part one, he will inflate Becky, and a few weeks would have passed. I also want to establish the euphoria he feels when he’s on them and his increase in strength. I’m debating moving the pregnancy announcement to a later date, but I might keep it in its place. I haven’t fully decided yet.

Download Part One: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1zlnPS-LMoOg_7UbqDWzPD2ZKP6bTi6fw?usp=sharing

Part Two: The beginning of the comic starts with Jamal and Becky in animal form and jumping straight into sex. What I want to do instead to establish a transition period is have Jamal look at himself in the mirror when he’s in the bathroom and freak out a bit because he doesn’t recognize himself in this form. And after they have sex he will fall asleep which will transition to the next part. But I will also be moving this part to Jamal’s dream sequence that I had in part four.

Part two is a continuation of Becky and Jamal leaving the OB appointment where they discover the news of the octuplets. In this part, I will have the Doctor on his laptop, and on the screen, it will show Jamal’s gym. He will make a phone call to a mysterious person and tell them that they have the assignment to do.  It will then transition to Becky and Jamal driving in which Jamal is checking his phone and a text says that he has a new client. While Becky is talking Jamal will realize that he’s lost track of so much time because of how big Becky has gotten in such a short time. And he will have an internal monolog about how he’s concerned with the gym.

Download Part Two: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1mG2m2nuzxqTX10lfMZ_gyKkwGUB9jhx-?usp=sharing

Part Three: This might be a tricky one because while I appreciate the hard work of the artist his specific style takes some time to complete. But, I want it to start off with Muscle Mike feeling the effect of the pills and while he’s lifting it causes him to continue to take more and more. He becomes obsessed with the overall feeling of strength and he eventually empties the bottle. It will then lead to the events that proceed at Hoppers. If the artist is unable to do that work I will have to go with Boom970 who is the original artist at the beginning of the comic.

Download Part Three: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1y6HTWvKTx0AWc751V7A4hBsURjjkf44p?usp=sharing

Part Four: As I stated in part two I will be replacing the dream sequence of part two with the colorized sequence. And if the artist is able I will be expanding the dream sequence for Becky. I want to start off with her trying on her old clothes and nothing fits (obviously) which then prompts her to get some maternity wear. And then I will end the comic part with both of them waking up saying they both had a crazy dream.

Download Part Four: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1tePy29zBTuYmZ2SozNpMK5bxC-WpHttx?usp=sharing

Part Five: The download you see isn’t finished because I’m refusing to work with the artist due to a few things I didn’t like. I will continue it with Boom970. I will also expand on Jamal realizing that Becky’s eating habits have become more extreme and he realizes her belly growth from stuffing herself. And once they get to the doctor's office Jamal will explain the effects he’s having because of the pills. The Doctor will be taking mental note of everything and will establish to the reader his plans. The Doctor will also take a measurement of Becky’s growth and tell the couple that their due date might be off a bit because the babies seem to be having accelerated growth. This will cause the Doctor to take notes that somehow the pills that were given to Becky to cause ovulation and the ones given to Jamal might have an effect on the babies.

(In the spin-off I plan on the boys having a set of unique characteristics when they’re adults. One will be super strong, one will attract anyone he chooses because of the pheromones, the twins will be superstar track runners, one will be a bottomless pit when it comes to eating but he will barely gain weight which is similar to Becky’s pregnancy. The other set of twins will be aggressive but they will break records for their college's football team. And the final one will be nerdy, quiet, and shy, but his dick and balls will be the biggest out of everyone because he’s been affected by the growth of the pills. I’m debating on him also having the ability to “hulk out” when he’s being bullied. His brothers are always there to protect him but I think I might have a section where he loses control of his temper. Also, he might have the abilities of all of his brothers combined.)

Download Part Five: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/17v9zqhxYflqsn-WdkxSIGQ3IMyOeQ2FV?usp=sharing

Part Six: There will be a small section where Jamal realizes that he looks different after looking in the mirror when he’s leaving the doctor's office to establish the change in art style.

Download Part Six: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/12wBMfks4gfY77t6dRqKihLLwuJErX_T9?usp=sharing

Part Seven to Ten: So far I see no need to change anything about these parts. But moving forward with parts these changes will allow me to establish the storyline better moving forward.

Download 7-10:

Seven: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1HuEwp4VR2sJbasP0U6kG0KAE5lvWUs_I?usp=sharing

Eight: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1IolnHphvRI1EMHFNDJeIAOO2oq9C6Xct?usp=sharing

Nine: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1FZ73-jgRdZhqsSEqrS0aF2bs5q6s0gD3?usp=sharing

Ten: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1MB-HJ9Uiul_FD9nwFc5lWUxwcnT7tA5z?usp=sharing