Chapter One Re-Write! and the Changes coming to BBL!

Hey everyone! I'M BACK! Before you read the rewrite to chapter one I wanted to say thank you for helping make the BBL content a reality. I'm far from being a rich man and you help make my horny imagination possible and I love sharing my love of big bellies with you all. The reason for the rewrites are because I want to adjust some issues with the previous version of the comic. I released a small portion of it to the public and they found the transitions between the different art styles a bit jarring. Also, I didn't like how in the first two chapters that I rushed into Becky's later stages of pregnancy. I feel that it didn't allow me to truly build up the relationship between Becky and Jamal. So now things are changing!

Here's the new chapter one, enjoy! Please leave a comment below if you have an critiques!

PART ONE:

PAGE ONE

Panel One: Becky is sitting on the bed at the Doctors office, and she looks sad. The Doctor is standing next to her, and he has his hand on her shoulder.

Doctor: “I’m sorry Mrs. Smith, I truly am but it seems like this cycle didn’t quite pan out as we had planned.”

Becky: “Is there anything else we can try?”

Doctor: “Possibly but it’s experimental.”

Becky: “Experimental?”

Doctor: “Disregard that Mrs. Smith let’s get some blood work done and we can see what out next steps will be from there and I will call you when we get the results back.”

Panel Two: Becky is walking down a hallway towards the women’s restroom; she has a band aid on her arm, and she has tears going down her face. There’s a woman in the far distance following behind

Becky: “Another failure…”

Panel Three: Becky is leaning over the sink and is crying she doesn’t notice a pregnant woman standing next to her. *Mask the face of the pregnant woman from the audience. *

Pregnant woman: “Hey, I know it isn’t none of my business but are you okay?”

Becky: “Yeah I’m…no…no it’s not okay we’ve been trying and trying for years, and nothing seems to work.”

Pregnant woman: “I know the feeling.”

Panel Four: Becky looks over at her belly.

Becky: “I’m sure you do…I’m sorry I shouldn’t have said that I’m just…upset.”

Pregnant woman: “I understand. Hey, listen I know I’m just a stranger, but I have something I know you haven’t tried yet and I’m proof that it works.”

Panel Five: The pregnant woman is holding a pill bottle and small tablets in her hands for Becky to take.

Pregnant woman: “This is what I took and as you can see it worked for me. The tablets are for you to take. If you take two of them it will jump start your ovulation, but I wouldn’t take all four unless you want twins. I did and I’ve got three in the oven now.”

Becky: “And the bottle?”

Pregnant woman: “That’s for the hubby to take it will give him a massive boost.”

Becky: “Oh he doesn’t need that there’s nothing wrong with him…just me.”

Pregnant woman: “Trust me they work better together, and the tablets last for a few months for you so you can take them anytime. He can start off with one pill but if he really wants to pack a punch, he can try two.”

Panel Six: Becky is holding the tablets in her hand and the bottle says Fertile Max Batch #002

Becky: “Are these natural?”

Pregnant woman: “As natural as the babies I’m carrying. I have to get going my appointment with the doc is in a few minutes. Take care.”

PAGE TWO

Panel One: Becky is sitting in the parking lot in her car and she’s holding the tablets in her hand.

Becky: “I wouldn’t take all four unless you want twins…should I do this?”

Panel Two (SPLIT ONE): Becky is holding the tablets in her hand and the empty package is in her other hand.

Becky: “We’ve tried so many other things and nothing has worked, I guess it couldn’t hurt to give it a try.”

SPLIT TWO: Becky swallows the pills.

Panel Three: Becky is driving home and smiling.

Becky: “Wow I feel so tingly and kind of hungry. Are those pills already working? I feel so…gitty.”

Panel Four: X-ray of Becky’s uterus and how her ovaries are swelling, and the pills are affecting her brain.

Panel Five: Becky parks her car in the driveway next to Jamal’s beat up truck.

Becky: “I wonder how Jamal will feel when he tries these!?”

Panel Six: Becky bursts through the door with the pills in her hand and a huge smile on her face.

Becky: “Honey I’ve got something for you!”

Jamal: “Oh really? What is it?”

PAGE THREE

Panel One: Jamal is reading the name on the bottle and looks confused, Becky looks nervous.

Jamal: “Fertile Max? What is this for?”

Becky: “I think it will help us have a baby can we give it a try?”

Jamal: “Is it safe?”

Becky: “Of course…I took a version of it myself and I feel great…in fact…”

Panel Two: Becky is looking at Jamal with lustful eyes and her legs are tightly pressed together. And Jamal has a smile on his face.

Becky: “I don’t know why but I’m so fucking horny I feel like I could climb all over you right now.”

Jamal: “Oh really? Let’s do something about that.”

Panel Three: Jamal takes four pills

Becky: “I think you were supposed to take one or two…or did she say a few?”

Jamal: “Uh oh! Did I mess up? What should I do?”

Becky: “No sweetie you’ll be fine…I think…don’t worry about it just meet me upstairs I’ll be ready for you once I get out the shower.”

Panel Four: Jamal is taking off his clothes

Jamal: “I hope I didn’t mess up by taking so much at once, I don’t feel weird or anything.”

Panel Five:  X-ray of Jamal’s brain and balls as the pills start to take effect.

Panel Six: Jamal’s eyes widen.

Jamal: “Whoa! What was that? I feel so…good! What’s taking her so long in there?”

PAGE FOUR

Panel One: Becky’s in the shower fingering herself and grabbing her breast.

Becky: “My God get it together girl…control yourself and finish taking a shower…I…I need him right now! JAMAL!!!”

Panel Two: Jamal is in the bathroom and sees Becky naked.

Jamal: “Becky are you okay?”

Becky: “No I need you right now!”

Panel Three: Becky is bent over and is bracing herself against the shower wall, Jamal is standing behind her with a hard on.

Becky: “Jamal hurry please and shove that fat dick in me I need you to hurry baby.”

Panel Four: * Jamal POV of him looking down at Becky’s naked ass as he smacks his dick on her butt. *

Panel Five: Jamal is fucking Becky in a standing doggy style in the shower.

Panel Six: Jamal has Becky bent over the bathroom sink and is aggressively fucking her, Becky has hearts in her eyes.”

PAGE FIVE

Panel One: Jamal and Becky are fucking missionary style on the bathroom floor the shower is still running.

Panel Two (SPLIT): While in the same missionary position on the bathroom floor, camera POV to Jamal’s balls swinging as he’s fucking Becky.

SPLIT Two: His balls slightly expand.

Panel Three (SPLIT): POV of Jamal the rear of Jamal fucking Becky missionary with his bigger balls.

Jamal: “Oh fuck I’m about too…”

SPLIT Two: Cum is spewing out of Becky.

Jamal: “CUUUUUUMMM!”

Panel Four: Jamal is standing up while Becky is still laying on the bathroom floor, she’s sweaty and panting and Jamal looks dizzy. Becky’s belly is a little bigger from being inflated.

Becky: “Wow you came a lot have you ever came that much before?”

Jamal: “Huh? I…what? I feel…weird.”

Panel Five: Jamal is emitting pheromones and it’s lingering towards Becky.

Becky: “You alright Hun?”

Jamal: “Yeah I blanked out there for a moment.”

Panel Six: X-ray of Becky smelling the pheromones and her uterus releasing eggs.

Becky: “You smell…AMAZING!”

PAGE SIX

Panel One: Becky is crawling on her hands and knees towards Jamal with hearts in her eyes and drooling. The pheromones are still attracting Becky to Jamal.

Becky: “I can’t help myself I need more of you. I need you RIGHT NOW!”

Jamal: “Hun I might need a second I don’t know if I can get…”

Panel Two: Becky pins Jamal against the wall and he’s hard again.

Becky: “You look hard to me.”

Panel Three: Jamal has Becky lifted up and is fucking her hard

Becky: “God…oh God…I forgot…how…big you are…”

Panel Four (SPLIT): Jamal’s dick thrusting inside of Becky

SPLIT Two: Jamal’s dick gets a little bigger

Panel Five: Jamal is carrying Becky out of the bathroom while they’re still fucking

Panel Six: Jamal falls backwards onto the bed; Becky is now doing forward facing cowgirl.

PAGE SEVEN

Panel One: Jamal’s face tightens as he’s trying to hold back the urge to cum.

Jamal: “I’m about to cum again.”

Becky: “I’ve already came three times just hold off a little longer please baby I’m so close again!”

Jamal: “I can’t…I need…too…CUM.”

Panel Two: Becky’s belly swells a little more as she continues to ride him.

Becky: “Oh yes baby fill me up! You’re cumming so much!”

Panel Three: Jamal looks dizzy again as Becky continues to ride him.

Becky: “Oh yes you’re still so fucking hard.”

Panel Four: POV: Jamal doesn’t know he’s standing and is looking around confused.

Jamal: “Where am…”

Becky: “Harder baby!”

Panel Five: Becky is bent over their dresser and they’re knocking things off of it her belly is a little bigger and Jamal looks surprised.

Jamal: “We’re still fucking!?”

Becky: “And don’t you stop I’m close again…fuck how many times can you cum babe?”

Panel Six: X-ray of Jamal inside Becky and she’s full of cum, his dick expands more.

Jamal: “I’m about to CUM!”

PAGE EIGHT

Panel One: Jamal looks confused. They’re fucking on the bed now; Becky is hanging off of the bed and is drooling.

Jamal: “When did we? Oh…shit I’m about to CUM AGAIN!”

Panel Two: They’re back in the bathroom and are still fucking he has Becky sitting on the bathroom sink. Jamal is sweating and looks tired, and Becky is exhausted too.

Jamal: “When did we…fuck I’m…”

Becky: “This is the last time baby I can’t take much more I’m so full it’s been hours now.”

Jamal: “CUMMING!”

PAGE NINE

Panel One: Jamal is laying in the bed; his dick is flopped over his leg and Becky is fast asleep and is laying on her back. Her stomach is still bloated.

Panel Two: Jamal wakes up and is looking around.

Jamal: “Oh my head…what…happened babe?”

Panel Three: Jamal notices Becky’s belly and pokes it and it giggles.”

Jamal: “Damn did I do that to her? I need to cool down and rinse my face off or something.”

Panel Four (SPLIT): Jamal is splashing water in his face.

Split Two: Jamal is standing in front of a body mirror (POV you can only see the top half of him until the next panel)

Panel Five: Jamal is wide-eyed when he sees his naked body in the mirror.

Jamal: “Did my dick get bigger or am I seeing things?”

Panel Six: Jamal is looking out of the bathroom at the small bulge Becky’s belly is making as she’s laying on her back.

Jamal: “I need to talk to her about this tomorrow.”

PAGE TEN

Panel One: Jamal is in the living room doing push-ups and Becky is coming down the stairs yawning in her night gown. Her belly is still the same size.

Becky: “Good morning, babe is you getting pumped up before you go back to the gym?”

Jamal: “Back?”

Panel Two: Jamal is standing next to Becky and is sweating; she has a smile on her face.

Jamal: “Back? I was there yesterday.”

Becky: “No you weren’t? You’ve been home for the past few weeks, remember?”

Jamal: “Oh...I have…that’s odd. But we need to talk about something, the sex we’ve been having…”

Becky: “These past few weeks you’ve been an animal I don’t know what’s gotten into you, but I love it.”

Jamal: “Weeks? We did all that last night.”

Panel Three: Becky is looking at Jamal and is confused.

Becky: “Jamal you’ve been home for almost four weeks now I don’t know what you’re talking about. Are you okay? You’ve been acting weird for a while now.”

Jamal: “I think I’m okay. Maybe it’s just the stress of the gym getting to me.”

Becky: “Well don’t worry yourself babe, the three of us will be just fine.”

Panel Four: Jamal looks shocked.

Jamal: “The three of us?”

Becky: “That’s right. I just found out this morning.”

Panel Five: Jamal is tightly hugging Becky.

Jamal: “Oh my goodness Hun I’m so happy to hear that I thought your belly was big because you were still full of cum.”

Panel Six (SPLIT): Becky’s face still looks happy as Jamal is hugging her.

SPLIT Two: Becky’s face drops to confusion as Jamal is still hugging her.

Becky: “Full of what?”

END CHAPTER ONE