Suddenly A Succubus Ch. 26
Added 2024-09-13 16:21:00 +0000 UTC“Amara? Amara?!” Tessa shouted, running to the
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I'm so happy you're enjoying my work! You're actually not the first person to bring up a similarity to Buffy, I've gotten it once before. I absolutely take that as a compliment :) I'm in the middle of watching Buffy for the very first time right now, actually. I didn't start until Book One of SaS was already finished, so the similar tone was a massive coincidence. When I did sit down to start Buffy, I was surprised at how many similarities I saw between it and my book! And while it's a shame I didn't get to see your thoughts as you moved through each chapter, I can absolutely settle for "Too eager for more to leave a comment". I'm much more active here than I am on all my other sites, so please don't hesitate to reach out, either directly or through comments, if you have anything you'd like to share or ask! My only other work at the moment is Blood & Chlorophyll, and it's got a fairly different vibe. It's a romance LitRPG that's a bit more cozy, in my opinion, and I hope you enjoy it! (And I agree, "Enter to Post" is always a little confusing. It trips me up constantly, especially since I do most of my writing on my tablet, which for some reason doesn't do that.)
Nyx Nyghtingale
2024-10-06 01:36:00 +0000 UTCAck - first time commenting on this platform. Not at a fan of “Enter to post”. I would normally comment going through the stories, but I’m not good at delayed gratification, and when the choice is “read the next chapter” vs “try to compose a worthy comment”, well I’ll just leave it there. However I did hit 5 Stars each time, so I’m not a complete loss. I enjoyed the plot lines, I liked the characters (at least the likable ones), and I really enjoyed the humor. I haven’t read all the comments posted on the stories (see above on delayed gratification) so I don’t know how often you get this, but…. Of course I had flashbacks to Buffy. Mostly I think it’s the underlying humor. (OK, maybe the demons a bit.). But back in the “before” times when Buffy was just fun without baggage, it had your vibe. To me anyway. And I watched every episode of Buffy, so that’s a good thing. Now I will catch my breath, checkout your other series, and then jump into Book . Thanks!
Walking in LA
2024-10-05 23:41:51 +0000 UTCNyx Nyghtingale, this story is great fun. I think I’ve pretty much read straight through from the first installment, after seeing it on the Pandemonium list.
Walking in LA
2024-10-05 23:25:54 +0000 UTCAfter roughly two books of build-up, it was so satisfying to have Amara yell at him to go to Hell XD
Nyx Nyghtingale
2024-09-15 01:27:23 +0000 UTCDouble thanks to brandon for being so eager to fulfill his destiny of going straight to hell
Ryan
2024-09-14 21:16:19 +0000 UTCYou should definitely go with your strengths. The male POV is for perspective only. Your writing should be something you do for you, not anyone else. It is clear from the Patreon comments posted that your fans (of which I consider myself to be a part of) like you and your writing for who you are. It isn't always necessary for people to get in touch with their "other" gender (men get in touch with their feminine side and women vice versa), but you have a unique perspective on that. I don't mean to pry into your personal life, but I have met many trans people who have had gender affirming surgery and those who have not. Some struggle with their more comfortable selves, sure of who they are sexually as well as who they love, but still with lingering doubts. Your writing has the ability to celebrate yourself, your loves and your beliefs. But it also has the ability to face your former self as a doorway towards understanding those aspects of sexuality that are often overlooked or worse, misunderstood (even by other trans individuals). We are all human souls encased in various "suits of skin and bones" that often shape our perspectives of ourselves and others and sometimes blind us to the core of what we share inside. Just as you have "changed suits" to find clarity in your life, you have also encountered a new set of problems and struggles to contend with. Your experience and your writing ability may help others dealing with an "ill-fitting suit" to see both the advantages of seeing a tailor or ways of dealing with the suit they were born with. After all, aren't Vee and Amara struggling with the conflict between the nature of their souls and their outer suits?
Dadhiker
2024-09-14 11:38:02 +0000 UTCYes, yes, yes a hundred times! A gasp of suspense, a victory shout, a satisfying ending, and a whole new beginning all in one chapter! Special thanks to Sebastian Wellington for attempting to trap Amara in the most obvious way for her to become powerful enough to overcome his supposedly-inescapable binding. If we ever see him again, I hope he won't have learned his lesson and he tries the same thing again! Maybe the best part about this chapter is seeing the payoff of Amara learning to harness her demonic powers. It feels like all of the individual events that happened across this series merge into a seamless whole when the time comes to beat the bad guys, and that's one of the most beautiful feelings in fiction! I can't wait for Book 3: Hellfire That Quenches the Heavenly Thirst!
AFanofRoses
2024-09-13 21:35:24 +0000 UTCBoo. :-P
Jeff
2024-09-13 21:11:30 +0000 UTCOooh it would be cool if those were all teasers for future plot points, wouldn't it? :P
Nyx Nyghtingale
2024-09-13 20:21:46 +0000 UTCI will admit, I have complicated feelings about writing from a male POV. While I'm absolutely not against it, one reason I write is because I want to fill a niche that I feel is quite underserved: queer, poly, women-centric stories. On a personal note, as a trans woman, I spent nearly thirty years thinking I was a man, hating it, and subconsciously doing everything I could to escape it. Needless to say, putting myself in a man's shows is somewhat uncomfortable. When I was younger, I used to see movies with a single, token woman in them, and joke that I would do the opposite if I ever got the chance to be a creator. Flash forward to now, and I've kinda stumbled into that exact dynamic with Nick. I'm sure my early years aren't reflective of a genuine male experience, since I was never actually a guy, but I definitely spent a long time steeped in male-oriented media and societal discussions. On one level, I think this afforded me a unique perspective on gender roles, but on another, I never actually engaged with male-centered media because it was aimed at something I wasn't. I'll be the first to admit that men are under-served in my work. At the end of the day, I realize I can't write a perfect story that satisfies everyone, so I'm trying to focus on my strengths. I'm excited to start Book Three, and give Nick more of a chance to stretch his legs in the narrative. I've always had a pretty solid idea of who he is, but the nature of Amara's early adventures meant he played a much smaller, supporting role. On a separate note, I do have a list of book ideas hidden away in my writing app, and one of them is centered on a male lead. I'm not sure when I'll get to that, sadly, as I already have roughly the next two years of content planned out. Blood & Chlorophyll is a lesbian romance story, and the two books I'm planning on writing after that (alongside SaS, which will continue for quite a while) will be focused on female leads. I realize this is an incredibly lengthy response, so I apologize for the wall of text. I'll certainly be doing a lot of self-examining as I spend more time with Nick in Book Three!
Nyx Nyghtingale
2024-09-13 20:21:04 +0000 UTCIt seems like Amara is more powerful than people expect demons to be. Vee was surprised that she could break her binding in ch14, and in this chapter she pretty much tore through the lesser demons and held her own with the greater demon. Was that planned, or is that just how it worked out? Also, nice last sentence. Vee is absolutely going to be corrupted at some point.
Jeff
2024-09-13 19:46:18 +0000 UTCI have yet to read your other stories, so what follows might be irrelevant. You have wonderful writing skills, please feel free to stretch out your imagination further. Consider writing a story with a male protagonist. I wrote an "okay" story with a female protagonist and was about to do another about a succubus until I read SaS and changed my character to an incubus. I plan to try my hand at another female protagonist in the future -- maybe. I'm currently reading the "court" series by Sara J Maas and am humbled by her writing ability. (If you haven't read her work, start with "A Court of Roses and Thorns" about faeries.). My point: I may not be that good at writing about a female protagonist (my opinion) but it gives me a better insight into both male and female characters and how they think and how to portray them.
Dadhiker
2024-09-13 19:21:58 +0000 UTCI know you're busy, so no hard feelings! I'm really happy you enjoyed the chapter. I was definitely laughing myself at the confluence of all the thirteens, especially after this book was so close to only having 12 chapters. Regarding future installments, I'm still planning on rooting the core narrative around Amara, but Book Three will start giving a bit more breathing room to other members of our cast. I'm really excited to show you what I've got cooking!
Nyx Nyghtingale
2024-09-13 19:05:00 +0000 UTCMy busy schedule has forced me to miss the rough draft, so only praises here, with a couple of exceptions (don't worry, nothing bad). 26 Chapters. When dealing with demonic cults, numbers have a way asserting themselves. I'm writing this on a Friday the 13th and the prime number 13 has had some sinister connotations, so twice 13 might reflect the two types of demonic forces in your story. (It has no true meaning really, but why not have some fun with it?). I've always suspected that a really good story it told through an author, who often doesn't have complete control over it, once it gets started. This chapter has a number of elements in it that represents the elements that made this such a great story: mystery - what happened to Amara?; Drama - all three female protagonists are captured; sex (self explanatory); action - (also self-explanatory); and humor - the hand rising from the dead and the ass-slapping at the end. Well done! I appreciate the creative ways you resolved a few complicated actions in the chapter. For example, the demon voices inside Amara and Wellington. I also appreciate the foreshadowing of summoning and controlling Amara from previous chapters (Brandon bring to get Amara's blood in Chapter 4(?) and also in a later chapter when Amara wiped some blood from her nose (I don't remember which chapter that was, but nothing came from that tissue then, but it was a great set up for this final chapter). Moving forward. You obviously left the door open for future chapters. There are some unresolved elements such as the status of Vee and Amara's relationship. You have the option of telling that story from Vee's perspective with occasional interludes from Amara, or continue on the predominantly Amara track. I'd like to see a larger role for Nick, but I respect your decision to keep your heroes all female (and your villains all male). This is a great first story! I agree with FanofRoses (rough draft comment) that I'm following it for the story line, not the sex, but you delivered on both. Thank you.
Dadhiker
2024-09-13 18:28:30 +0000 UTCOh no...my granola mines are ruined....
Ryan
2024-09-13 18:10:18 +0000 UTCTHREE handfuls? *Starts changing future plot points*
Nyx Nyghtingale
2024-09-13 17:43:59 +0000 UTCGlad you enjoyed everything that came after! I like mixing things up with the spicy scenes, and I totally understand they're not always for everyone <3
Nyx Nyghtingale
2024-09-13 17:41:57 +0000 UTCEnded up skimming over most of the gangbang, not really my thing, but everything else was excellent. The mysterious foreshadowing about Amara was great and so was her and Vee finaly taking a step towards reconsiliation
Kriss
2024-09-13 17:13:25 +0000 UTCSounds like Amara is only half succubus, maybe? I'm betting her mom is the succubus and her dad is some sort of wind spirit with how much she loves flying. 10 dollars and 3 whole handfuls of granola.
Ryan
2024-09-13 17:07:58 +0000 UTCGreat ending of the story. Cannot wait to see what is next for Amara and the rest.
Tim Wininger
2024-09-13 16:59:18 +0000 UTC
