Tanta's Bargain: Page 14 & 15 (sketch WIP)
Added 2020-08-09 11:52:25 +0000 UTCRefined these pages today on stream, so thanks for everyone who made it to cheer me on! Gonna take today off of streaming to recover a bit, but I'll be right back at it after that.
Enjoy the update!
EDIT: there was an issue with page 15 related to text bubbles, I uploaded a fixed version.
Comments
I agree with Katlek, it does feel more impactful to have the "never saw him again" corresponding with the "leaving him behind"
The Renewing Destroyer, Consumer of Podcasts and Fine Art, Watcher of the Watched,Great New One, Precocious Vrrrrrb
2020-08-11 22:36:32 +0000 UTCI've definitely got some edits I want to make before it goes to inks, so I'll consider this when it comes to that step and see how it feels. Thanks!
Zaush
2020-08-11 14:43:12 +0000 UTCYeah, I see how that can make the panels look a little crowded. I'd give it a pass just this once, since such situation occurs only on this page, and that line with the mood of the second panel really fit together. :)
Katlek
2020-08-10 16:14:58 +0000 UTCI could, yes! I had considered it, but something about it makes me think it would make the panels a bit too "one text box per panel". What do you think?
Zaush
2020-08-10 14:41:43 +0000 UTCWouldn't the "I never saw them again" have a stronger impact if it was separated onto the second panel? Just a thought, hope you don't mind such opinions.
Katlek
2020-08-09 16:45:39 +0000 UTCUpdated!
Zaush
2020-08-09 12:08:32 +0000 UTCThe dialogue box in page 14 is the same dialogue in the first box of page 15.
SpotTheCat
2020-08-09 12:03:06 +0000 UTCLookin interesting soo far
Toddly
2020-08-09 11:53:20 +0000 UTC
