'Legacy' Chapter 1
Added 2015-04-22 02:55:46 +0000 UTCIt's that time again! I'm starting up my work on a new novel. 'Legacy' is set in the Red Lantern universe, and takes place, roughly twenty years before the events of Red Lantern. I'll be posting chapters here several days in advance of their post on FA, so enjoy :)
Comments
I've already got a great feeling about this story :)
DiezlWolf
2015-04-24 04:45:00 +0000 UTCAlso, at the end, "wormed his up near," I'm guessing it's "wormed his way up" or the like. Either way, love the story, especially the interesting take of the caste system in the beginning!
CastJudgment
2015-04-23 12:15:25 +0000 UTCWell, seeing how Ahsan got meat, and the other slaves avoided picking on him, and told Kadar to stay away, I'm guessing he's there because he showed sympathy toward the slaves (to the point of doing something that's a no no) or some such.
Skie
2015-04-22 19:34:51 +0000 UTCthanks! self-editing is NOT best editing :P
Rukis
2015-04-22 18:19:14 +0000 UTCYeah, thanks for pointing that out, apparently I've been spelling it wrong. Weird that my Word program didn't catch that :P
Rukis
2015-04-22 18:18:46 +0000 UTCEeeh, I like this. When you say 'soder' though, do you mean 'solder'? The metal stuff used for ...well, soldering things? I can't seem to find a definition of 'soder' in a search.
Baylock
2015-04-22 18:05:28 +0000 UTCWe'll I've taken time to read over this chapter a good three or four times now. And I must say I find Kadar interesting, but my heart goes out to Ahsan! As could be expected. ;) From the very first art I seen of him some time ago I always felt something for him. He just seemed to have a gentle face and sweet expression always. And I'm still very happy that I was able to get one of the first if not the first original of him. Really looking forward to knowing him, and Kadar more! Although I swear I'm going to try and not get to attached this time! Oh who am I kidding... :P And I might not know Ahsan as well as Kadar at this point but I'd already let him sleep beside me.
Cosmo
2015-04-22 16:16:18 +0000 UTCIt probably needs some editing, but I wanted to read the next chapter right away :)
Skie
2015-04-22 12:20:52 +0000 UTCOutstanding first chapter!! LOVE all of the characters introduced so far, especially Ahsan :) Really looking forward to seeing how Kadar's story unfolds, and how it ties into the RL we currently know
Connor Laleff
2015-04-22 06:07:10 +0000 UTCAwesome start. One typo at the beginning, though: "Their is no elevation" instead of "There is no elevation."
2015-04-22 05:47:18 +0000 UTCAmazing opening chapter :D and its cool to see an aardwolf character, even if he is a bit of a jerk *chuckles*
ProwlingPaws
2015-04-22 05:22:22 +0000 UTCI been waiting for this! :D
Cosmo
2015-04-22 05:20:41 +0000 UTCGreat start! I love Ahsan immediately, Can't wait to find out what's up with him. And i like the fact that it's present tense.
Trejaan Cavelion
2015-04-22 03:37:18 +0000 UTC
