Legacy Chapter 9

Another fantastic chapter. I do appreciate (I can't bring myself to say 'like' because it's just so heart wrenching) how you use 'fairness'. Matron got what she deserved, Kadar's father did: seems fair. But unfair actions make the read squirm and rage against a character: I'm thinking of the use of the gun in this chapter. But I also find it interesting that what is brutally unfair of a villain, Matron Sura here, is seen as ingenuity for a protagonist: like how Luther dispatches Irving in Heretic. Additionally when we see Irving's mother's reaction to the unfairness, we, as readers, feel guilty for applauding Luther. Granted, the two are not identical, but nonetheless, the use of fairness invokes a kind of primal emotion on par in intensity as love or hatred. Fairness is a remarkable way to show character (Sura versus the more honorable Anala) and you do it so well. Additionally, how a character dies tends to encapsulate, even finalize, a character: Kadar's cowardly father, righteous Lochan, and selfless Grant (just to reopen old wounds for the OTBP fans). Doesn't quite take the sting away, but it is very well done in your writing.

CastJudgment

Great story so far. But now what are they going to do about the collars? :O

Skie

i always like your stories, but i just want to make a point on it, i mean everything that he learned from his father "labor is noble. It is hard, endless work, but it is respectable." "He worked for my mother when she was carrying me. He worked harder when they had to feed me as a young pup, before I could earn my own keep." he just threw them into the trash and kill him only because "he wanted to hurt someone back" sound too overkill even for the protagonist, basically he became in something worse than his father, a blind murderer...

i don't like this chapter too much, only because the story of the past of kadar seems too rushed...

Sorry for the spoilers here.. An emotional chapter - I can see how difficult it was to write. So Sad. Ashan's loss of innocence now that he has killed. Kadar's admission of murdering his father, and Lochan's betrayal with the weapon of cowards. Atleast he was able to die, standing with a sword in his hand like the warrior he is.

Marcwolf

I was seriously on edge the whole way through this chapter. Superb writing for sure. It was sad to see Lochan go, but I can't say I didn't see it coming from some angle, and he died both a hero and a bad ass anyway. I really want to know what these two are gonna do if they actually escape, but I'm pretty convinced that the Liberator mentioned earlier might be of interest. BUT PLEASE LET THEM LIVE!

Tiller Brown

ha!

Rukis

Brutal. But very good storytelling.

Randall

:( We've reached our death quota now for this story. No more please.

Cosmo

*Throw boxes of tissues at Connor in anticipation* :'(

Wǝidz

Just.......damn...right in the feels...

Y-Foxy

That was both heartbreaking and awesome.

Baylock

marf??? why does THAT worries me especially coming from you.

Karmakat