Kindred - Chapter 16
Added 2020-04-13 21:00:01 +0000 UTCI need to talk about this chapter for a moment.
I'm sorry for the wait everyone, but writing this chapter was challenging for a number of reasons. It was technically challenging, due to the complexity of writing a gunfight from the perspective of one character, while still showing as much of the action and important scenes as possible. In comics I'm able to lay out scenes in a more cinematic fashion, focusing on action from a number of different perspectives. Since my novels are all first-person, this means it's especially hard to show the audience all the necessary beats, especially in a frenzied scene where many of the characters are far apart from one another. I hope I somehow navigated that in this chapter, and that it isn't too confusing for you all. But I'd welcome feedback.
This chapter was also difficult for a reason I think most of you have anticipated for a while now, if you've read my other novels. So, let's get the warnings out of the way.
- SPOILERS BELOW, but a necessary warning I feel, for those of you who might need it -
This chapter contains graphic violence, and character death.
It is also a CLIFFHANGER, and if that's the sort of thing that might seriously cause you anxiety until you get answers, maybe wait until the next chapter is out before you read this one.
Comments
I obviously meant 'hat' : P
Rukis
2020-04-15 19:16:46 +0000 UTCOne quick edit: You might want to search for the word Hate... cuz I don't think that Jackwald was wearing it on his head.
Trejaan Cavelion
2020-04-15 07:59:30 +0000 UTCAwesome chapter! Can't wait for the next!
Trejaan Cavelion
2020-04-15 07:58:31 +0000 UTCAfter this, I expect more moments of Tulimak going savage.
Alex Peterson
2020-04-15 00:26:19 +0000 UTCHoly carp rukis. This is like a final stand scene from a movie. I wish this was in Theaters right now. Can’t wait for chapter 17. Please hope it comes soon.
Daniel Ortiz
2020-04-14 00:25:17 +0000 UTCSo intense!! One of your best action sequences to date, it might even be the best. Very well written and I was able to follow the chaos perfectly. Can't wait for more!
Connor Laleff
2020-04-13 22:04:38 +0000 UTCI can't tell you how relieved I am to hear that. I know I got something wrong. . . but I really tried to do my best.
Rukis
2020-04-13 21:44:19 +0000 UTCOh my god. How vivid, how real. On the edge of my seat reading this. I could smell the powder, hear the gunshots, see the participants running from cover to cover. The research and extra time you took to give it that detail definitely paid off.
Randall
2020-04-13 21:40:37 +0000 UTCWell written, very tragic and sad, especially that young... :( I was left thinking of the ending of The last of the Mohicans, one of my favorite films. As always I’m looking forward to seeing where things go and as always get overly emotional and swear I’ll not get invested again into another story, which of course I always will.
Cosmo
2020-04-13 21:30:27 +0000 UTC
