Kindred - Chapter 20
Added 2020-04-27 01:29:49 +0000 UTCOne of the really satisfying things about pre-planning a book is that as you get closer to the end, the plot kinda starts snapping together and you begin to feel competent, finally.
Anyway. I don't write 'heist' stuff, like ever. So I have no idea how this came out. As always, please feel free to feed me with nourishing replies and grammar/punctuation/whatever you find that's wrong edits.
Comments
This comes off as unconventional when you put this chapter with the rest of the story. As this is like a heist, it's good that you don't write in how they plan. Finnegan and Tulimak are damn good actors, given the false argument. A few fair worries in the process; you gotta wonder if they get compromised so soon.
Alex Peterson
2020-04-29 00:23:22 +0000 UTCSo this is the script to the new heist movie Finn's Three in which Finn is clearly the George Cloony character. Odina is the Brad Pitt character and Tuli is the Matt Daemon character. All joking aside you really set things up very well making use of all the things you'd expect to happen in a heist type circumstance. Good building of tension as they progress step by step on their wits and a little bit of luck. Definitely a very thrilling read.
Y-Foxy
2020-04-27 06:53:27 +0000 UTCShit that was intense! Gotta love it when a plan comes together. Genius stuff. Tuli and Finn sold the hell out of it. The more they keep talking about the "future" together, and the more Tuli keeps thinking about it, the more I want it and the more scared I get 😭 I'm loving the brisk pacing we're having here too and all of the side characters feel so well realized. I want those sugar cookies!
Connor Laleff
2020-04-27 02:53:51 +0000 UTC
