Dangerous Men - Parts 1-3
Added 2021-06-01 08:04:41 +0000 UTCNew chapter! This one was short, only around 3k, but I'm for some reason very happy with the dialogue and the way the interactions are going in this short story.
I feel like I'm finally hitting a stride with writing, where I don't cringe as much reading my own stuff. Please tell me what you thought, I am still an amateur writer and feedback is helpful regardless where you're at.
Or just voyeuristically geek out over these two being in the same room together, Idunno. I've been doing that.
Comments
So.. can we assume that Finn tried something - and liked it with our dear (and desperately horny) Admiral. Be even more fun if Finn knew that Luther also knew Grayson
Marcwolf
2021-06-01 13:39:31 +0000 UTCEeeeeeee!! What a great update to wake up to! I admit I went 'dawww' when Luther said he wouldn't mind having the scent of another man linger in the room for the duration of his stay. Finn comforting Luther, or at least trying to, on the subject of Mikhail is also very sweet. I already knew I loved Finn, but if I hadn't read Kindred, this dialogue would've done it again. It's very satisfying to see Luther's vulnerability and frustrated, aching heart shine through Now time to destroy some counterfeitwolf ass.
Connor Laleff
2021-06-01 11:51:44 +0000 UTCTease...
Cassandra Mann
2021-06-01 11:27:06 +0000 UTCThat's interesting! I think it might confuse the readers if I write it that way, though. . . .
Rukis
2021-06-01 10:36:13 +0000 UTCOne minor thing: in most of Europe, if a building has more than one story, the bottom one ISN'T the 1st floor. It's the ground floor. You go up the stairs to the first, and up another flight to the second etc. Admittedly, that's the way it is in this world; no saying that's how it would have been in Amuresca. ;)
Trejaan Cavelion
2021-06-01 08:59:04 +0000 UTCI really love the way you do the verbal sparring... and how it slowly evolves into something more as they begin to slip past each others defenses... or the drink does it for them.
Trejaan Cavelion
2021-06-01 08:56:41 +0000 UTCI'll chuckle about you being an "amateur" later, since I know it tends to annoy you.
Trejaan Cavelion
2021-06-01 08:55:40 +0000 UTC
