had a lot of fun writing and tweaking keshet's Writer Dialog here. i don't often get the chance to get into the "prose" mindset anymore.
originally, i didn't intend to mention the wine again at all, and keshet was intended to set it down with the other glass, but i decided while doing the previous page that she would hang a lampshade on it. a lot of the decisions i ultimately make about keshet's actions and dialog hinge on her perceptiveness and leaning on the fourth wall, to avoid making her seem like an NPC on the fringes of Protagonist Outis's story.
had outis not implied they were going to drink it (probably!), she likely would have finished that one, but i also didn't want to give her the impression of having a Problem.
Charlie Mead
2018-02-23 20:11:39 +0000 UTChazel
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