familial stranger, page 5
Added 2018-03-26 02:34:22 +0000 UTCfirst page - previous page - next page
mmm just a set-up page unfortunately; i felt jumping straight to lola and jason meeting would be jarring, so i let the themes and tone build a bit.
the way i framed the first part of this page were... interesting to me.
the reader is presented with the information that lola's flying somewhere in the visuals of the panels before the dialog says sugar bought her a ticket, which means showing it in that order makes it sort of redundant from a solely utilitarian standpoint of writing where everything must provide new information to the reader.
i felt compelled to keep it how it is for some reason, and i wondered what the reason was. a vague sense of pacing, but i do feel many readers find wordless scenes confusing and hard to read, so i think that it provides explanation for that, if nothing else.
as a reminder, there will be no more updates until sometime at the beginning of next month.
Comments
Also I'm very emotional about this comic in general and like...extremely invested in it. Glad Jason's doing so fuckin well go Jason lmao
Khyle
2018-03-27 11:15:51 +0000 UTCI honestly dig the interplay of Sugar and Lola's convo with the panels? It works really well and it kind of drives home that she's doing this huge thing all on her own and also the urgency that they obviously feel the need to do it with? And there's a mini resolution in Sugar clarifying that she's buying Lola's ticket tbh. It works to round out the conversation and bring us back to the start of the scene and the context for how/why Lola was flying at all. Not redundant at all imo
Khyle
2018-03-27 11:14:52 +0000 UTCoh man shes doing this all on her own.. really interesting though to be so assertive about her name though. i hope her dad immediately going with it/not questioning the change is indacitive of the rest of his personality
skarmorite
2018-03-26 23:14:27 +0000 UTC
