Kronii and Calli's Special Service - Reward Preview
Added 2025-04-06 19:19:43 +0000 UTCHope you will enjoy it !
Preview for our final reward.
- Hanada Yanochi
Comments
Thank you ! If you give me enough time then I can look up more clips and make better conversation. But...you know, this set already took 3 weeks so I am on fire now. Anyway, it will be done today. Hope I can keep this quality for future sets.
花田やのち - Yanochi Hanada
2025-04-08 02:27:59 +0000 UTCgreat job. i'm really looking forward to this set. the grammar has gotten alot better and the flow of the dialogue has improved alot since you first tried adding them. this is what i subbed for long ago
seenothing
2025-04-08 02:11:55 +0000 UTCThis is one of the longest comments you have ever made, you know. Looks like you have fun with those dialogue so I can feel at ease somehow. About the G-spot, I took it from here. Pretty funny though lol https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lh5qx9NLUNk Even Though all that fun, this set took too much time I think. It has been 3 weeks since Calli's set so I had better seriously consider whenever making double characters like this one. Being stuck too long in progressing hell could be very bad for business. I must be faster on the next set or I will be in big trouble with the schedule again. Anyway, There are still 15 pages left. Should be done tomorrow. I am back to work now !
花田やのち - Yanochi Hanada
2025-04-07 09:37:50 +0000 UTCThis is absolutely wonderful! The dialogue has a good flow to it, with a back and forth between the two that oozes with their character and the added spice of the lewd situation. I had a lot of fun looking at their faces on every page because you gave them such a diverse range of expression, which further brings the situation to life. You also get a lot of mileage out of the pose with both girls! For the dialogue: on page 1, "asses" should be ass. Cakes is fine as is, cheeks would be fine, but with ass, both sides together are one thing. On page 4, gentlemens should be gentlemen and I think "one luckiest guest" reads better with "the" instead of "one", and "ghosh" should be "gosh". On page 9, I'd put "what" after "hear", and I'd tweak "I got it enough today already" to "I got enough of it today already". That's everything that stuck out to me for editing. I thought about commenting on the "g-spots" line, because I wasn't sure whether women only had one or not, but after going down a weird research rabbit hole it turns out that's a matter of debate and terminology so I think it's fine as is. Apparently there are two? And there are other zones that people might call a g-spot even if they're technically different areas. Pretty interesting, actually. The dialogue itself is delightful, I loved it. As I said, there's good flow to it, and I think you did a good job constructing a natural back and forth between the two and the viewer. Gigi is kind of crazy, isn't she? But in a fun way, a good way. Gigi-spot is a fun callback both to their streams but also to her guest appearance in the Kroniicoin short. I love teasing Calli, but I feel like I'd also want to spoil her at the same time, so it's fun to see a bit of both as she takes her first turn. Kronii's impatience is attractive too, and heightens the lewdness of the scene. The whole scene as it plays out is playfully lewd in a way I really appreciate. I'm sorry, Calli, but I think it's our duty to discuss thigh highs. Besides, Kronii speaks wisdom in saying "beautiful legs need proper praise", that might be one of my favorite lines from this piece, along with "get ready to march to the pleasure world"! I think dialogue can get kind of tricky when you add more and more participants, but I think you handled it well in this piece and did a good job with it. Calli's gap moe and Kronii's teasing create a fun dynamic that goes through some twists and turns as the scene progresses. I like how you have them speak to the viewer, too, and immerse the point of view character into the action. I hope you enjoyed writing it too, despite the difficulties you might have faced! I also love every face on every page. It adds to the dialogue and lets the girls put their personality on full display. I think my favorites for each are probably Kronii's greedy face on page 8 and Calli's look of satisfaction on page 14, and I love Calli's devious smile after all of the teasing Kronii was giving earlier. A little Kronii Karma for all of her shenanigans :P Seeing the pose and facial progression through the differences was a real treat. I like how much versatility you got out of this pose with different positions, fingering, etc. I think sometimes poses work better as a pinup or for action and can be kind of tricky to work with for the other side of things, but it feels like the poses the girls have here did well for both, and I think the way you composed the entire scene helped with that. True to the setting, the girls and their assets put on a real show! Anyway, sorry to go on! I do really love this piece. I'm excited to see the rest of the variations, but I also don't mind waiting, you need to rest after all! We know you've been working hard, so please take the time you need :) Thank you again for your hard work, and for the updates! I'm looking forward to Maid Kronii as well. Good luck! Stay healthy and happy!
Toastywafflz
2025-04-07 05:29:39 +0000 UTC
![カネコツ[kanesys]](https://samsuka.com/istorage/20926.jpg)
