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I know that’s a strange pair of words, but leaving a job you hate to pursue a better though uncertain future takes some guts. Humbling, because I doubt I would have the balls to make that choice, had I a similar talent.

rick dienel

That's the thing--I'm still unpublished, and will remain so for quite some time as I don't have any works that have been completed.

FortySixtyFour

Man, I've heard my decision called a lot of things, but never brave or humbling. Last I heard, my coworkers from the plant were all laughing at me for being the guy who left a steady job to go write porn, and joke that they're going to run into me working the counter at Burger King.

FortySixtyFour

It would be much, much, much more complicated than that, by several orders of magnitude. rlfj's A Fresh Start has his protagonist set up in a position to negotiate with Bill Gates (Chapter 72), and I think that author has an excellent grasp on the difficulties involved. Gates had a very good idea of what he had and what it would be worth.

FortySixtyFour

Look into posting it on google play, perhaps. A lot of amater authors do that for very low price points and it gets signal boosted in recommendations.

Aetherian

Really, I meant to say just how impressed I am by both of the storylines you are working. Started by reading your posts on Literotica, and thought then that you were one of the few who could transition to becoming a full time author. This new story proves that. Your decision to devote yourself to your art is both brave and humbling.

rick dienel

Rick Dienel, your silence here says more than words ever could.

FortySixtyFour

I was on the fence about her doing just that. However, Tabitha had no positive memories of him, as he was absent most of her past life, and in addition has always thought poorly of him for being a criminal. Everyone in the Lower Park was generally associated with being criminals and lowlifes ever since the police officer was killed there in the past (or three months in the future, in this life.) Tabitha HATED the Lower Park having that stigma attached.

FortySixtyFour

Good catch.

FortySixtyFour

rick dienel

Ah family...friends that you can't get rid of even if you wanted to. That's a good line. I'm guessing those cousins of hers are Uncle Danny's boys? Does she know how his conviction affected them in the future? I don't recall if it was mentioned earlier, but what was he convicted for? Maybe she can start inquiring as to how Uncle Danny is doing and/or what he's up to? Who knows, maybe she can make a difference there and keep him from doing whatever it was that sent him to prison?

Jedi Khan

Great segment. I think when Tabitha corrects Nick it should be 'Than you were' instead of 'Then you were'. Still loving the story progression. Thank you.

Robert E. Poole

This was supposed to be a response to my earlier post.

Malcolm Tent

Not necessarily. Starter companies in the foundation stages sell stock for pennies or less. Some of the brand new penny stocks sell at .0001 or lower, you can get hundreds of shares for a few bucks. A bit of basic knowledge is more than enough, hell she could just send bill gates a letter with a few bills and ask for shares lol.

Malcolm Tent

The truth coming out is one thing, anyone believing her is another... haha. Any million improbable explanations are going to be trusted before the one everyone sees as impossible.

FortySixtyFour

I'm starting to like the cousins more and more. They are maturing thanks to this new role model. There is still obvious awe and they are still ... innocent of the ways of the world, I guess you could say. I can see them being close friends she would actually WANT to have. I think she needs to find someone to tell the truth to. I'm leaning towards that artist girl. Definately the girl she is going to adopt, but that is too far in the future. She needs someone she can truly trust.

Roethan

I've tried to have Tabitha come off as stubborn but not so stoic as to be unshakeable. Her initial reaction to figuring out she was in the past was a small mental breakdown rather than cool acceptance. Mrs. Shannon Moore definitely still has a large role to play in the story, though readers may start to question which of them's really the mother.

FortySixtyFour

If Tabitha does end up encountering a situation that is emotionally beyond her capabilities to handle, it will be interesting to see if she ends up reaching out to her mother for comfort. Even if her mother is "younger" in terms of life experience at this point in the story, she's still her *mother*.

andy may phan

Hmm. I might have a relationship as a subplot, but I'll likely keep it PG-13 this time. I'm not real great at writing sexual tension.

FortySixtyFour

The basic requirement for that is having money to invest to begin with, though, and part of the premise is that her starting point in life is well below the poverty line.

FortySixtyFour

Im still waiting for at least some basic stock manipulation lol. Nothing detailed but everyone knows stuff like invest in google or microsoft. And shes in a prime time period for that.

Malcolm Tent

I LIKE the way she handled Mrs. Moore. That was just everything it could or should be. I'm a bit more mixed on how she treats the others; she's certainly acting like the grown-up in the room with everyone, which makes sense given both her mental age and the fact of dealing with the kids makes that necessary- and looking back a little, I see more that she's treating her grandmother like an equal, which is preferable to my initial impression. I'm also appreciative of the way she harps on the problems, fat in particular; that kind of response is what she'd need to power through all this and stay the new course- but I'm really looking forward to when the teenage hormones that were muted by first weight and then age her whole first life kick in, and she fully emotionally realizes she really ISN'T an old lady in a more-functional body, since being in shape really does impact the body chemicals and neurochemistry in a big way. Just take a look at the claimed sexual activity level of athletes during the Olympics as a sample.

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