RE: Trailer Trash 48, A very difficult dinner.
Added 2023-01-31 11:52:00 +0000 UTCThe long drive back from Florence was quiet, wi
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Her dad is just so frustrating. How can he not take his daughters side. Just because Lisa is family? What if she gets molested or god forbid raped by a family member. Would he just not believe her. Innocent until proven guilty? Its family, they wouldn't do that? How far does that mentality go? Fathers are supposed to protect their daughters. Her mom needs help herself and her dad would rather believe his sister in law for some reason. So she doesn't have anyone protecting her. All that she's been through, almost losing her life and her still can't at least hear her out. Smh. No wonder she lives with another family.
Ty
2023-03-24 05:34:46 +0000 UTCImo Tabitha should get that bike, since when Hannah grows up a bit more she would love to get 'Tabitha's bike' because they're just adorable
Oliver
2023-03-10 23:22:21 +0000 UTCI know I'm super late to the party but don't cut Bobby out. He really makes this liveable. You need something to break up that misery.
Dizzy
2023-02-24 03:31:44 +0000 UTCOh, and Tweety Bird. How did I forget about Tweety Bird being weirdly popular? I'm a bit young for it, but my brother wasn't. That whole shopping scene was perfect, but that was the most weirdly specific nostalgia hit yet.
Zach
2023-02-10 18:47:10 +0000 UTCThis chapter was beautiful. If don't cut Bobby if you don't absolutely have to for pacing. He's a quick break before everything gets heavy. It's funny how weirdly accurate he is, that he's just a character, and that he sees clearly that her side of the court wasn't even set up. The guy is practically the male version of a Manic Pixy Dream Girl, he's there to save her and be a romantic icon, but knows when its not time yet
Zach
2023-02-10 18:42:39 +0000 UTCWell,... I was going to comment about her mum actually doing quite well... But she didn't actually do anything, which is pretty much thebroot cause of her issues...
Jostikas
2023-02-05 18:32:13 +0000 UTCDon't cut Bobby, he hangs a perfect lampshade on the whole situation.
Jostikas
2023-02-05 18:28:31 +0000 UTCIf anything, the fact that this "feature the worst personal qualities of each of the characters" makes it feels real. Some days that's what you get; everything sucks and nothing goes your way. Even the POV not wanting to deal with it works; a protagonist wanting to just say "shove it" and walk way from something they really should be dealing with is the kind of dose of reality that help keep "Mary Sue" well out of the picture.
benjamin shropshire
2023-02-05 16:07:16 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter! Sometimes life doesn’t get a clean ending and I think you did that wonderfully here in this chapter. A lot of times people think that they have to eventually bring everything together, but life‘s not like that. I can really feel the struggle and the dysfunction in the family that you put here in this novel. It’s the first chapter that actually shows how difficult family relations can be. I hope you continue to write. You have done so well so far!
Undead Writer
2023-02-05 06:40:10 +0000 UTCThis story, no matter the update speed, is worth far more than 1$ a month.
Mundane
2023-02-03 13:48:51 +0000 UTCI would leave it like it is, Bobby is a nice contrast. And family can be messy. I couldn’t imagine a clean resolution to this situation. It’s amazing to me how people can hold so many seemingly contradictory beliefs, that seem so obvious to outsiders, and so internally consistent for themselves.
Chad L.
2023-02-01 19:45:03 +0000 UTCI really liked the chapter. And Bobby, too. If he's going to stay in the Story, I wouldn't cut his POV part out. Also, I like how transparent you are with us about your circumstances, which is why I'll keep supporting you.
Kiwi
2023-02-01 17:49:30 +0000 UTCThat poor Applebees waitress lmao. Hope they tipped well.
DreamweaverMirar
2023-02-01 14:52:05 +0000 UTCthank you for the chapter ^__^ love Bobby too xD and I hope to read more of his point of view in the future :D
Lua Cojan
2023-02-01 11:57:28 +0000 UTCHey 40604 thanks for the chapter. I was reading this over at RR when I saw your note about how much trouble you've been having lately. Figured I better sign up and help support you.
Christopher Schenkel
2023-02-01 06:49:53 +0000 UTCThank you for the pick up today I needed it
Jeanie6754
2023-02-01 01:34:13 +0000 UTCThat chapter was a fun read. I'd keep the Bobby part in honestly, it gives a nice break from all the other stuff. Plus, he's great.
Xencarn
2023-02-01 00:33:59 +0000 UTCThat scene in the Applebee's hit hard. I've got a big family, and I love them, but some of them...well, let's say I know better than to let them wander around the house alone when they come to visit. I've seen what happens when you put too much trust in someone just because they're "family".
Empty Shelf
2023-02-01 00:05:42 +0000 UTCI think you;re right to bring up Bobby 'crushing on her', Tabby has percieved that he;s hiding his inteligence at the convenience store and at MacDonald's, he did well in the cinema before the showing, Officer Williams trusts gim with keeping an eye on Tabby and Tabby plays around with the idea of dating him. Poor Bobby! I reckon he's going to suffer with that crush!
Thomas Stocks
2023-01-31 23:53:48 +0000 UTCI agree completely but Tabby and Alicia feel further off to me. Not far future but certainly not soon. Besides Tabitha is barely aware of her interest in Bobby. Something dramatic would need to happen for her attention to shift, let alone for her to recognize it.
Stuart T
2023-01-31 21:29:30 +0000 UTCI just wanted to comment on the price of their meals. 2045? Put, 2023 and we're already at those prices! I think they charge $120 for a 9 Oz sirloin now. Drinks are extra. (Slight exaggeration)
Roethan
2023-01-31 19:56:43 +0000 UTCI like Bobby, but would rather see her with Alicia.
Thomas Corbin
2023-01-31 18:49:45 +0000 UTCThis is an awesome chapter. As stated in the author's note, it lays out the Moore family's lowest qualities in a show-don't-tell way. This is where each of them stands. Love it! I like the Bobby section, but I can also see how it's out of place in a chapter primarily about the Moores and their internal struggle(s). I will ask this (painfully aware that I'm not an editor, just a lowly schmuck in the comments section): how important will Bobby be to the story going forward? If the plan is for him to be a bit part in the grand narrative, then his section here can be jettisoned to make the chapter more focused (I, personally, would replace it with the parental shopping trip, since it fills in the time break between the birthday party and the dinner while still being directly related to the two). However, if he is going to be an important character, then his section (or some variant of it) definitely needs to be somewhere. It sets up his view of the situation.
Jimbo1023
2023-01-31 18:46:57 +0000 UTCI like bobby, he makes some salient points about the wierdness of it all.
David Ford
2023-01-31 18:14:25 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter! I feel like your Auther's Note at the end is almost as good as the chapter! Or at least it's like that for me, because I feel exactly the same! Bobby is just Bobby teenage boy with the little quirks and "romance fantasies" that come with it, but nothing in any way negative, while the "Dinner for Moore's" definitely did all that you described in the Author's note! But that's also not really a bad thing, these "character flaws and quirks" are simply there and will hopefully overtime be recognized and adressed by said characters!
Gopard
2023-01-31 16:08:12 +0000 UTCPut me down as another voice for keeping the Bobby interlude - it fleshes out his character slightly more and recasts how events could seem a bit surreal from an outsider's perspective. Though on my first read, back in the previous A fragment, I got a hint of a sinister(?) vibe - thought that Bobby lived with his brother (only) and wondered what happened to their parents. Then realized they were probably just asleep. Argh. Too much X-Files and Evil Dead/Army of Darkness while growing up, I guess. But I really like getting Bobby's view on the events and other people - if you really feel it can't work in this chapter, maybe put it somewhere else?
Dashinhi
2023-01-31 15:17:54 +0000 UTCDefinitely keep Bobby's segment. We're so invested in Tabby's side of things that it's not apparent just how *weird* the party and stuff was without that external perspective
Gemyma
2023-01-31 15:03:39 +0000 UTCTftc. I love all the little details and I also hate the Lisa arc. It's like a good narrative arc that I absolutely hate because it makes me think of my own struggles with getting through to my parents. When I first read the chapters where she came back and then again when I listened to the audiobook I was fuming both times. I'm so excited for what comes next though!
Sean
2023-01-31 14:59:29 +0000 UTCPlease don't cut Bobby. That part is awesome. And while the story isn't happy right here nobody's acting out of character and it all seems reasonable for who they are and where they are.
Michael Deans
2023-01-31 14:16:36 +0000 UTCAh I freaking love this story. Thanks!
Matt
2023-01-31 13:59:14 +0000 UTCI like the Bobby stuff, I think it's good to have an insight into how he is when he isn't trying super hard to impress a girl he likes
MedicBear
2023-01-31 13:03:36 +0000 UTC
