『奴隷闘女』の続き３（E）
Added 2024-01-19 08:51:03 +0000 UTCThank you for your support.
This is a continuation from last time of "Slave Fighting woman Dirty fight".
(This english translation is formulaic and not colloquial, so I think it's strange, but I hope you enjoy it.)
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That's all for now.
I will upload the next page when it is ready.
Comments
The typesetting is much better on this one. There are a few areas where the English could be improved but it's still understandable. Mainly I would recommend using "!" instead of "." for powerful/impactful lines of dialogue. Eg. when he tells her she looks pathetic, using "!" would work really well. Another thing, hehehe is a bit effeminate whereas hahaha is more masculine, so in the last text box, hahaha would fit better
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2024-01-20 06:28:50 +0000 UTC
