Prose Chapter 5 - VANISH
Added 2021-12-17 03:56:35 +0000 UTCHello all! It's that time again... prose time!
Vanish was intense, wasn't it? I think we made some subtle but substantial edits in the script to tighten up the flow of the action and really hammer home the emotional elements. There are still some fun bits that are prose-specific, however, like Jonah thinking about Mercy sleeping on his shoulder~
Enjoy!
- Laurel
Comments
This was a tone of fun to read. Enjoyed reading what Jonah thought of sleeping Mercy. "It is nice to pretend" is such a weary sentence coming from Jonah. Also, liked the little moment of Mercy imagining her time with her father. Always enjoy reading what our main character's are thinking in the moment. So thanks again for the prose for this chapter. Like seeing how the action is written and how the rain fairies crumbled away.
TheMadTrickster
2021-12-19 23:23:23 +0000 UTCWell actually I do know why- the writing is fantastic
SanaBanana
2021-12-18 06:32:15 +0000 UTC“she dropped to the ground, a stone sinking to the bottom of a well” I dunno why but I really really liked how you guys wrote that^^
SanaBanana
2021-12-18 06:31:37 +0000 UTC
