[TWS] Chapter 229 – End of the World [HIDDEN]
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I just subscribed because I'm a big fan of your recent additions to Amazon. While the story and characters are great, the grammar and sentence structure has always needed a bit of work. A prime example is in this chapter: "might or might not consider not". Out-of-context, it sounds ridiculous, and in-context it needs some work. You had some of these problems in the Amazon published works and they have always bothered me. It seems to happen when you combine a double negative with something else, so my general advice would be to watch the double negatives, and when they do occur, read the full sentence and paragraph over a few times. You do it rarely and I thoroughly enjoy your work despite them. For this specific example: "Both of them had a past they might or might not consider not what they would like it to have been". It could better be rephrased to "Both of them had a troubled past that they wish could have been better".
IncinX
2022-12-26 10:56:51 +0000 UTCI want the baby of a GOD! OK, I can see where you are coming from there :)
Colin Dearing
2022-12-23 15:12:14 +0000 UTCThx for the chapter. 👍👏👏
MadRat
2022-12-03 20:14:46 +0000 UTCJust a small request, strictly for scientific purposes.
Dan Garff
2022-11-05 22:24:37 +0000 UTCWell, This will make Kendra happy.
Jon Torres
2022-11-05 06:03:24 +0000 UTCThx for the chapter
Kconraw
2022-11-05 00:47:48 +0000 UTCOh wow. I know just how Ast must feel. Random hotties wanting to kiss and then jump his bones right after -ahem- >.>
Darth Mole
2022-11-04 16:08:11 +0000 UTCWell, at least the cliff is funny.
Mark Ryane
2022-11-04 15:20:47 +0000 UTCAwe man is it Tuesday tomorrow? Yeah it is hee hee hee
John Duncan
2022-11-04 14:53:37 +0000 UTCAnd now there must be an yell from at least 2 of his girls of the Kind: "You can't, I want Masters child first." And one of them should be Bryn.
NopiSoul
2022-11-04 14:27:23 +0000 UTC
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