Opinions and critiques
Added 2020-03-27 00:32:40 +0000 UTCTo my new patrons, welcome! To my loyal patrons, welcome again XD
How are you? Hope you're all doing well.
As you can see, work will still continue as usual in webtoons. Good thing!
Right now, I'm currently writing season 2 but I would really like to get some of your opinions and critiques regarding the story (or technical art) that I may have improved.
I know I have my editor for this XD But it never hurts to ask for secondary opinions as a reader's perspective.
I asked this for patrons only to avoid troll accounts to answer this question in my social media(s) lol and especially since y'all are willing to dish out some moolah my way, I know you also want to see me improve the story, be it production-wise, story-wise, etc.
Let me know what you think of Age Matters after reading season 1!
Comments
I'm super late to this party (read all 96 episodes in two days and just joined here) But I will say when I decided to finally open this comic up, what sucked me in was how relatable Rose was (I too am 30 and feel in the same boat, and watching her overcome that) and I do love the more relatable moments of the story vs all big, rich exec (love standiel and Ruby). Would like to see a bit more of everyone's backstory, especially rose. Also that moment of Akira reflecting on being rejected as a kid for being nerdy, you see all these glimpses to dark pasts. Also no need to rush anything, I love the slow burn of the story. Also, I love your art style and love how you draw everyone's eyes. But more than anything your scenery! I'd say add more of those, cause that Oceanside sunset dinner scene rainbow sunset was amazing, and the fire skies of the season to trailer. Also really like how you have aspects of the scenery drip between scenes (i.e the falling leaves).
Chrissie Rakowski
2020-07-04 21:10:57 +0000 UTCHehehhe we'll see meehehewhhw
Enjelicious
2020-06-18 12:41:33 +0000 UTCI love this story and Iβm so glad itβs coming back next week. I want more romance with Rose and Daniel. I would to see it come full circle to the first episode when sheβs talking on the phone with him. And then move their relationship closer. I want to see him kiss her and her not push him away ππ₯°π
Monica
2020-06-18 07:05:56 +0000 UTCCan u pls dm me πππ¬
Enjelicious
2020-03-31 02:45:25 +0000 UTCπ I just saw that autocorrect has disintegrated my grammar in some instances along these comments. If there is anything that's not clear you can contact me for clarification xxx
Corinna Heitmann
2020-03-28 06:56:08 +0000 UTCAccidentally posted the above comment and can't edit it now... *Things like Daniel's chain. *Furthermore, Also, thank you for asking our opinion, it is relevant to focus on your consumers and fans and shows your really interested in growing yourself and getting better. I think you are in a really good way to become an even greater artist and will enjoy supporting you along this path. In the end it's also important to think of your health so don't overwork yourself and take good care of your wrists etc. Much love β€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈ
Corinna Heitmann
2020-03-28 06:53:58 +0000 UTCIn addition to that though I enjoy the little thinks you focus on like Daniels chain in that chapter 85 e.g. So Fuehrermore, don't let pressure from other people rush your story, the slow burn is a quality of it and in addition there are lots of open questions in the story like childowhimsy said and it's relevant that you keep tabs on them and tie them up at some point as i for example find it annoying when things are left for the imagination.
Corinna Heitmann
2020-03-28 06:49:15 +0000 UTCI enjoy your art style immensely and the story telling is good. The slow burn is lovely and the snippets of love you give are enough the feed the hungry ship pirates. I especially enjoy that your setting is in the adult (business) world and addresses adult issues, I would like that to continue. As it's all very high level, rich people stuff atm I would like to see more casual and normal moments again in their lives, bit more background maybe about the various characters. Something like a side story in between of home life or introduction of the various characters (family, hobbies, welcome to my crib kinda stuff) or coworkers e.g. as long as that doesn't inhibit the story telling . Anyways as for criticising your technical artwork: proportions are at most times well done, I like that you don't show super skinny characters but we'll proportioned ones in terms of body image. Slim but not thin. I enjoy the amount of differential angles etc. You are taking. Even though you engage in lots of differential facial expressions that aver very easily understandable I fell you have room for improvement here to distinguish the single characters more, e.g. in chapter 85 when Dylan and Daniel are searching for rose, the panel where Dylan says: 'it's rose! You were with her?!' their faces are very very similar. Eyes, nose and mouth look very close to copy and paste here. In additional even though you engage in mild shadows in most of the artwork I feel here e.g. there is not enough depth to their faces. So I think you might be able to work on that.
Corinna Heitmann
2020-03-28 06:46:30 +0000 UTCI enjoy your style of art, the thought that goes into creating the backgrounds & character placement hasnβt gone unnoticed. The story-telling is also an art, in itself - you have a wonderful talent of building characters with small layers, that combine into a very complex over-arching narrative for the individuals. You create an excellent dialogue with your characters & it makes their interactions and character progressions even more believable. Hands down, love your work.
2020-03-28 00:44:07 +0000 UTCI agree. The work, the art, and the plot are great. It move all of my emotions.
Stiina
2020-03-27 20:16:52 +0000 UTCFirst of all, hope you're well and safe. Second, It's a honour the fact that you ask us readers suggestions or contructive criticisms. That shows you are a very humble person. Your art is very good and I can't imagine someone complaining about it. I'm sure you'll tell us more about the main characters' backstories to let us understand better the whole plot and the reasons why they are and act in a certain way. As other readers say, I really hope the slow burn romance starts...well...to burn!!!π π π But judging by the way season 1 ended, seeing Daniel and Rose getting more and more close, I think things can just grow even more... OMG, no double meaning, I SWEAR!!! πππ So, keep up with your good work!! See you soon!! πππ
Gianna
2020-03-27 08:09:51 +0000 UTCSuper love the story! I think it's almost pretty flawless thought like everyone else, dying for more romantic stuffs to happen xD, but as a reader, kinda curious about more details in other character's back story (e.g Via) and not sure if you have already planned that in Season 2~ Nevertheless, excited for the upcoming season!!! Fighting~
yuuno
2020-03-27 06:47:02 +0000 UTCI love the story so much!! I think the only thing I would add for critique is editing for proper grammar, but thatβs just because I pick up on grammar issues easily. Otherwise, I have been hanging onto the edge of my seat waiting to see what will happen! Oh actually one other thing is, I wish it was easier to keep track of how much time has passed. But youβre doing a great job!!! Or else I wouldnβt have become a patron π
2020-03-27 02:52:14 +0000 UTCLOVE the story, but willing to help if I can! What specific feed back are you looking for? π₯°
Ri
2020-03-27 02:36:44 +0000 UTCi honestly just love your art and the story in general ππ i can't wait for season 2! been a huge fan since discover :D
2020-03-27 02:07:14 +0000 UTCHonestly I'm throwing my moolah at you because I already think you do an awesome job and I want you to be able to continue doing it the way you are. Not trying to suck up I just genuinely don't know what I would critique. It's a slow burn so naturally I'm desperate for lovey~dovey~ stuff but that just means you're doing the romance thing right hahaha. Loved the action in the last several chapters! That really added to all the feels and deepened the plot. There are still so many unanswered questions that have me on the edge of my seat for S2! I recommend AM to everyone and they wind up hooked too. You're doing great!
2020-03-27 01:08:26 +0000 UTCI love it! I really do. I love the lengths and story line. The dialogue and characters are awesome! I canβt wait for season two and my curiosity is very high as to what is going on where Daniel sees himself with Rose!
Sarah Mays
2020-03-27 00:52:21 +0000 UTCI love the story and I love your art. Iβve been a fan for a long time!!
sarastrigoi
2020-03-27 00:48:12 +0000 UTCI love the story. It's a fresh idea, the characters are well written and the drawings are beautiful. I am curious. Whatever happened to the friend who she's housesitting for? She called but Rose didn't get to talk with her. Who was the mystery guy watching Rose's apartment? Rose started off super spicy but got milder as the story developed. Part of it seems related to her uncertainty of what Daniel's thinking. Finally there's Dylan. Awesome guy so why isn't he crushing on Rose, versus Via? And Via's been accused of being a gold digger...is she? Who did she send the pic of Rose to?
ChildOWhimsy
2020-03-27 00:40:03 +0000 UTCHi! Glad you're doing well hope you and yours are all safe and healthy at this time. What specific feedback are you looking for? If it's art stuff I am totally ignorant but if it's like story wise (pacing, themes, scenarios etc) I could offer my feeble opinions. Quite honestly this is one of my favorite webtoons and I adore everything you do with it so it feels odd trying to give you feedback on something I see as pretty flawless (not trying to overcompliment you, I just seriously love this)
Katlyn Joswsy
2020-03-27 00:37:24 +0000 UTC