Feedback request: Acts 1 to 6
Added 2024-07-04 09:59:07 +0000 UTCHello everyone!
With version 0.7 releasing in a few days, I'll soon start working on version 0.8, which will focus on improving Part 1, including Acts I to VI (chapters 1 to 18, the last three being part of version 0.7).
If you are having specific feedback on these chapters, now is the best time to share them. Once version 0.8 releases, these chapters will be considered "done", and probably not change much in the future.
So share away!
Comments
I really like the Ashley messages. I love the rate of development and volume of writing. I liked the end of the 0.7.x(?) version (itch.io's current I think) where you have the option to decline rawdogging for the MC but worry that too many decisions like this risk a splintering of potential timelines that become a drag on development. Having said that, chastity would be peak.
chriso
2024-08-07 11:20:18 +0000 UTCHaha, uncovering that without being spoiled would be one of those Kojima-esque moments where you're amazed at the lengths the developer has gone to.
chriso
2024-08-07 11:15:52 +0000 UTCI would love to see more of Laura x Asley and how that reaches sex and their after relationship. Perhaps how Tasha maybe can get involved too. Also i noticed that in ch 17 after Asley asks you if you want a picture of her "titties" or a kiss from her and Laura if you choose the kiss the text goes on a loop. It shows up to the picture then it starts all over again.
Alex
2024-07-16 06:47:21 +0000 UTCMC needs to initiate contact with Laura more, it's pretty one sides, always (98% of the time) laura initiating contact. Just a "How is your day honey?" goes a long way. And they really need to have converations not just lazy 1-3 words replys.
Vkola
2024-07-15 02:28:04 +0000 UTCSame feedback as me. Showing the MC with Laura would really help add to established relationship. Especially going into this kind of scenario.
Neelis
2024-07-13 03:57:18 +0000 UTCPretty much how I feel about it too. I have a feeling it won’t go along that way but here’s hoping.
Neelis
2024-07-13 03:56:24 +0000 UTCThank you, Le Stag! Loving the game so far. I had a minor complaint about the latest chapters, i like to play the dominant route more and in the chapter where Laura wants to start having sex raw it feels like the only reason shes doing it is because she wants to fuck Nathan raw. Not sure if its possible but is there a way to make it optional that only you get to fuck her raw or she doesnt fuck him raw until you give express permission? I understand Laura is her own person but the open relationship works if both parties agree to both rather than Laura making unilateral decisions and you have to just agree. Maybe i am reading into it too much, but i hope this doesnt go down the cliche route where Laura falls in love with the bulls dick and just cant help herself and cheats on the MC, its so rare to find a good game like this which shows an actual healthy open relationship. Whatever decision you make i am sure it will be good because the game has been awesome so far!
meh
2024-07-12 15:44:40 +0000 UTCI think some pics of the MC and Laura from their fun times is warranted. In the instances where Laura is like "when I get home we're gonna fuck," it should be followed by the next morning of her sharing a pic of her and the MC from that event with something like "I think this pic is my favorite from last night" or something.
Suprentus
2024-07-12 14:55:00 +0000 UTCMaybe it's just me, I think the previous setting where at the start of the story MC has been talking about sharing with Laura for a while is better. Another thing is in the first few chapter, Laurra ask if he wants to be humiliated while she doing it, but apart from that, there's little disccusion about how intense it will go. And btw, I still don't know how my playthrough get into dom, neutral or sub route. I suspect the system has some problem tracking the preferences.
Cheng
2024-07-11 13:57:28 +0000 UTCI'm a native English speaker with experience in proofreading and localisation. I'd love to help you iron out some of the dialogue in the game (spelling errors, incorrect cases of plural use, and some minor awkward dialogue) for free. I'm really enjoying the game so far and want to see it be the best it can be, that's why I'm offering. If you're open to the suggestion I'd love to help. We can exchange discord names or something if you're up for it.
DDIBLIS
2024-07-11 07:04:52 +0000 UTCI just hope you still keep in mind that this is still "netorase" not "netorare", everything is just festish in the sexual matters of both. Hopefully Laura will still love (or respect in the relationship with) her boyfriend. Thanks for the game, I really like your gameplay design ideas.
Thịnh Boo
2024-07-10 16:11:05 +0000 UTCWhat if you have a picture of Laura fucking another guy as your wallpaper, another character can notice and it can become a conversation.
ken
2024-07-09 11:08:19 +0000 UTCCan her bf clean the bull cum after she return home
asnawi abdullah
2024-07-09 06:16:34 +0000 UTCWould love to see Laura to branch out and hook up and hit on other guys as well. I really enjoyed the scene where Laura told the MC how to get off while describing what she did, more of that. Would also enjoy more interactions with Laura's friends. Big fan of the game. Whatever you do I'm sure I'l enjoy it.
Jo Kerr
2024-07-07 17:56:40 +0000 UTCMay be for more build up some beach bar in her bikini where some guy go to grope her. Laura asking to Ashley to be in charge to send messages and photos to MC (may be even a photo of herself). This seems to me a good last step/party before the bar night and the first BJ. But Le Stag you are the writer and the dev Thx for the work
meuh_trash
2024-07-07 17:34:13 +0000 UTC1- The game keeps jamming at certain spots, maybe a "force reply" button somewhere at the top of the conversation could solve it. 2- Some "photos" tend to appear in some runs and not in others, despite picking pretty much the same replies, with Nathan and the Blondie, mainly. 3- The dialog about the lingerie photo in the "after party" part, is the same whether you told her to send it to him or to you.
Azath0th
2024-07-07 14:03:53 +0000 UTCThe game starts as though we switched over to a new phone. Perhaps there could be a sudo "registration and setup" phase at the beginning where we could give our protagonist a custom name and ethnicity to buy into the whole self insertion of the game.
John Smith
2024-07-06 18:12:41 +0000 UTCThe writing in the early chapters could use a work over. Longer replys and some emojis thrown in would work wonders. Try to change up the dialoge a bit, maybe throw in into chatgpt and ask for the conversations back as a couple in their mid 20s? Do MC and Laura have proper petnames for eachother, not just babe? Ashley is blondie for instance.
Vkola
2024-07-06 03:25:09 +0000 UTCPratical note, a speed up button like they have in Ren'py would be great for replaying chapters.
Mike smith
2024-07-05 21:25:58 +0000 UTCdefinitely like the idea of nathan being in communication with the MC and deciding things for laura. I love how the other characters get involved and comment on Laura's progression.
Mike smith
2024-07-05 21:21:44 +0000 UTCI would like to see more teasing, building up the suspension, maybe Laura getting the attention of other men, starting to get sluttier, not wearing panties. Also it would be nice that she has more action with random men.
lodonini
2024-07-05 16:15:33 +0000 UTCGood stroy so far. But more save slots with naming Option and maybe a small Screenshot of the current scene like renpy.
Dr. Dick
2024-07-05 02:58:40 +0000 UTCThe whole game is having us immersed as though we are operating our own phone. Perhaps we find out Ashley has a side hustle as an Onlyfans inspired app content creator and could potentially do the occasional collaboration with Laura.
John Smith
2024-07-05 02:52:32 +0000 UTCHonestly, I think you have good storytelling instincts and solid writing skills overall. So my feedback is simply that you should trust your own instincts going forward. The only major thing I would like to see is more save slots :)
Terrance Phillip
2024-07-05 02:26:26 +0000 UTCSame as Claire, as there is actual love there, I hope it stays as well, and I am curious as to the new development, bareback sex if our guys is just the boyfriend does not seem the big a deal, unless it was for instance in respect to-celebrating lil cuckys proposal and her acceptance and she gives him a choice..she can celebrate with nathan-or with the mc-though this choice should only be allowed on the mid and/or dominant paths, not on the submissive. Just my thoughts...as for the previous chapters, maybe some extra sexy interludes where we can really see how much the mc and our girl love each other. perhaps a little scene after she comes home from her first time with Nathan and he desperately works at making her his again...( no face necessary, just keep his head out of the picture.) just some thoughts, thanks for reading them.
Robert Lee Schechter
2024-07-05 00:17:09 +0000 UTCI haven't played the latest two updates so this is just feedback from the first few chapters. One thing I'd like to see is going back over the dialogue and refreshing some of the lines, some do come across as a little stilted. Laura constantly calling the MC a horny boy every time he expresses his thirstiness does run the risk of getting a little old and stale. I'm not saying change the line entirely, but maybe you could spice some of those lines up or change the phrasing. This is just my thoughts anyway. The only other thing I would to note is since the other commenters are talking about kinks and sex, I thought I'd just put forth that I love the slow build up and general relationship building of these early chapters, that these two characters do actually love each other, and I hope as the story goes along scenes like those doesn't disappear for non-stop sex.
Claire Bear
2024-07-04 23:48:45 +0000 UTCLove the game so far. For the dominant part will there be chastity stuff?
cristian paul
2024-07-04 22:05:50 +0000 UTCThe tendency is determined after the idea is suggested, so that wouldn't be possible.
Le Stag
2024-07-04 21:11:04 +0000 UTCIf at the beginning of the story there is a choice setting whether Laura or the MC is the most dominant, then Laura could be the one to suggest to the MC that they should have a more open relationship.
Forking Man
2024-07-04 21:07:19 +0000 UTCI would like to see more teasing and build up before she goes all the way with someone else.
Devo
2024-07-04 20:52:20 +0000 UTCAnd also i'd like to see some denial talk already. Laura can choose to be with nathan over mc for some instances for example. Also Nathan decides what mc can get or can't. I'd like our bull to have some power over Laura's decisions which boosts the jealousy to the peak! Thanks.
Zandatsu XL
2024-07-04 20:32:53 +0000 UTCThough It's about mechanics, when chat is not active and you see a pop-up notification show up on top, i'd like to be able to open the chat clicking on the notification pop-up and directly reach the chat related. I always end up clicking on the popup and nothing happens. A must have feature i believe.
Zandatsu XL
2024-07-04 20:24:04 +0000 UTCIf possible, I don't want to start a new save file with every new updates.
Meloir Zhee
2024-07-04 19:48:40 +0000 UTCi like to see more femdom +humiliation
عروض كوبون
2024-07-04 18:18:16 +0000 UTCHoneslty you are doing very fine i dont even know what to ask to add, maybe some chill music in background could be nice ? I just Hope that you wont add bbc fetish stuff (even if im black) it will make itlm look like a ugly regular porn cuckold sht , just my opinion ofc.
Silvo75
2024-07-04 17:27:23 +0000 UTCWhy not ? Fuck bbc fetish (as a black Guy )
Silvo75
2024-07-04 17:12:39 +0000 UTCMore male characters, why is everyone white? :D anyway to add animation? Great game so far
TBK
2024-07-04 15:34:51 +0000 UTCI would like to see more about the charakter that got the first bj. Maybe he could be a own Charakter.
Nickel
2024-07-04 15:34:40 +0000 UTCTara messaging us about laura and nathan kissing in the kitchen felt a bit weird, perhaps you could look over that dialogue and adjust it to make it feel more natural? maybe add a couple ordinary interactions with tara earlier on so it isnt the first time she messages us in the game (i havent played 0.6 from the start yet so apologies if this was already implemented) Laura really likes calling me 'horny boy' lmao but its kinda cute idm it
Menace 2
2024-07-04 14:45:34 +0000 UTCI would like to see a second story path where the main character also has sex with other characters so that it is fair in this open relationship
vinszento
2024-07-04 14:05:27 +0000 UTCFirst, just to second to above - great game, already as is! That said, two thoughts on the earlier parts, though understanding that additional options / a slight increase in non-linearity might be far out of the range: .) The first two encounters, both in the bar and with Nathan felt a little rushed. First commented with "baby steps" and then all of a sudden the bathroom / kneeling on the floor ... Maybe Laura letting herself, say, get groped as a first step and BJ afterwards might show a more smooth progression. Really awesome would be additional choices, like being able to stop her from the first BJ after letting herself getting felt up - or not, depending on how the user feels. (not later ones though of course). .) The teasing after the first getting drunk / flirting encounter with that random Mike worked fantastic I think. But maybe even better would be an option to talk her into actually sending him a pic of herself? maybe some texting too - nothing more at that point of course, but that could also help easing the progression a little ...
Ron
2024-07-04 14:02:21 +0000 UTCI'm using the android version of v0.6.4 and played through in 1 save without using the chapter selections or changing the sub/dom settings. I've encountered 2 bugs. #1: I chose to send Nathan the blue lingerie pic when Laura is hanging out with Ashley. Then during the party Laura tells me that I didn't send it to Nathan. #2: I told Laura not to use a condom twice. Her second response was "that's new" like I never had the first interaction.
Thanatos486
2024-07-04 13:32:56 +0000 UTCI should make it clear, however, that I really do enjoy your game. Great work. 👍
Xo Xo
2024-07-04 13:08:39 +0000 UTCI said it once before (on Discord I think) that the my main "issue" (very strong word for it) is that the build up for Laura's first sexual encounters with other guys needs more buildup. The other thing is, that the submissive route works in a way that it really feels submissive, as in, no sexual interactions with Ashley and Tara, possibly not "reclaiming" Laura anymore after she sleeps with her bull(s) - it could even be Laura herself, who denies it because sex with MC doesn't satisfy her anymore.
Xo Xo
2024-07-04 13:08:05 +0000 UTCCan be optional or a "something more" mc have access after scene with Laura
Nicocroc
2024-07-04 12:29:13 +0000 UTCIt may be because I started directly at the new chapters in the latest versions, but the game didn't let me say I liked receiving Ashley's pictures, it auto replied I didn't want them.
Molly
2024-07-04 12:16:57 +0000 UTCIs not that ‘breaking’ the teasing and so on to have access so much ? May be a better thing be some sort of sharing photo gallery like it is possible between users of google photo ? And may be she can even delete/unshare some of them when MC talk about it ? Or error if Ashely/Tara underwares ? I saying that because a part of the game is Laura denied/play with MC like the underware photo she can only send to Nathan. Giving access to her mobile will break this :(
meuh_trash
2024-07-04 12:08:01 +0000 UTCThing about those firsts acts is for someone who look not very into the sharing she quickly go for it in one go. Some more build up, message with Laura, exchanges with Ashley explaining how she push Laura and some other (like the exposing of Laura) can help of how finally she opens to the idea more than the few exchanges. May be there is some IRL talk with MC but may be confirm it by message about thinking about what you said/show yesterday and so.
meuh_trash
2024-07-04 12:03:00 +0000 UTCFor 1 to 6, I lack some more interactions/reports from what happened in bar and so. May be some reports from Ashley while at the bar with a picture of Laura dancing with another guy with hands on ass, Laura talking in the ear of some dude (Laura teasing ‘may be she is kissing him) or testing the MC will about all this, like exposing Laura to other guys in some of the clothes/underwear shopping. In term of gameplay there is the fact (may be it is what you want) we do not know the real difference between some answers, exemple ‘I love you too’ versus ‘a kissing smiley’. Some prefer the ‘I love you’ because it is more sentimental ? I miss also some reference to Laura colleagues and MC colleagues. Feel like MC have no life, may be at some point he can have a party plan (or work trip) and Laura then stay at home teasing him with text to make him come back quicker or she will also go out with other people that Ashley ? As she seems to be a waitress some complaint about customers ? A way to have some more Tara interaction like taking Laura to the gym ? Talking about Tara may be some more text about how weird Laura seems to be while MC is not here ? Actually their life seems close to be some shut in people.
meuh_trash
2024-07-04 11:39:42 +0000 UTCi dont remember what chapter it was, but there was one part where the gf asks you if you want to get the picture, or if the bull should get it instead. for me at least (android version) the gf later acts as if i kept the picture for myself no matter what choice i make
Reclusive Raiders
2024-07-04 11:37:17 +0000 UTCoh and maybe a few other contacts, hot guys from work, neighbours, friends of Ashley, etc, that will keep us phantasizing where this journey might lead ;)
-LeM
2024-07-04 11:24:58 +0000 UTCThat's what version 0.8 will focus on. Acts 1 to 3 will determine your tendency, and it will be used starting from Act 4. I can't show these dialogues too soon though, I want to let you decide organically.
Le Stag
2024-07-04 10:55:10 +0000 UTCPost this Idea on discord but not sure you see so I retry here. What do you think about adding a "spy-app" that Laura would agree to install so that the MC can see her screen, her conversations with Nathan or Ashley, and the photos she sends? We can say that she decides from the app what she lets the MC see. And even in the future consider that other characters install the app. Like that it open other perspective and maybe you can use some image that you don't know what to do.
Nicocroc
2024-07-04 10:39:35 +0000 UTCThe story is already great overall. I'd suggest to make a possible route where the NTS play will keep the focus on the Laura x Nathan relationship (without other bulls) with even more depth between them.
Marvis
2024-07-04 10:31:19 +0000 UTCIn the moments between NTS events when Laura and the MC are casually talking, I think it would be hotter if Laura talked a bit more about Nathan and NTS in general in more horny, teasing manner; moreso than what's currently written. Idk if that'll break realism if the dialogue is 99% horny though.
Coonway McFlannigan
2024-07-04 10:21:38 +0000 UTCI think a main point of feedback I'd maybe have unless my game was bugged, is to include the "dominant vs submissive" talks/changes in the earlier patches too, not just once Nathan is introduced.
Addstir
2024-07-04 10:20:42 +0000 UTCIt would be good to have conversation with other characters as well.
IchaIchaSennin
2024-07-04 10:01:58 +0000 UTC
