Whit n' Wild - Page 18 (PENCILS) - FEEDBACK REQUEST
Added 2021-01-26 07:53:33 +0000 UTCWe're getting our projects moving once again, slowly yet surely!
This next page has been redrawn a couple times in preliminary form, as I had a couple different directions I could take the action at this point. Initially I wanted to have another page of boobsex, but decided to just go ahead with the "boobs pushed up against the steamy glass" scene and get to the good stuff! Only problem is, as you can see here, I'm having a bit of difficulty coming up with a solid bit of dialog for Peter's last word balloon.
SO YES! What do you all think? What would be a good line to put there for Peter to be saying to Whitney at this moment? My first take (you can kinda see it erased in the balloon) was him saying "I'm just thinking maybe I should drive YOU crazy for a change," but it was a bit too long. I'm thinking it needs a shorter line, like something quicker and snappier. Let's hear your suggestions!
I plan to do another page of pencils before inking this one, so look forward to seeing that one posted later this week as well! We may not get them finished in color before the end of the month, but you all will see them as soon as they are ready. Progress is progress! :)
Comments
I'm hoping soon. We've been getting better with producing the main comic pages, and I have a couple more Whit N Wild pages to pencil before I'll ink and color the whole batch.
Jonathan Ponikvar
2021-03-15 00:16:47 +0000 UTCWhen will it be in colour?
James Mitchell
2021-03-10 08:59:45 +0000 UTCA few options! "But you've definitely earned one!" "Just making sure we're BOTH nice and wet!" "Just want to strike while the water's hot!" "Just relieving some of your tension!" "But what about YOUR 'hard-to-reach places'?"
Mobius Scarf
2021-01-26 14:26:30 +0000 UTCAn accurate depiction of one's reaction to having that done to them, lol. She's about to make his head explode!
Jonathan Ponikvar
2021-01-26 08:03:04 +0000 UTCOmg Peter's face in the second panel... π
LaneFurno
2021-01-26 07:54:57 +0000 UTC
