Minotaur March!
Added 2019-03-07 00:40:12 +0000 UTCHey all!
One of my original goals on Patreon was to improve my writing, but a visual novel is mostly dialogue. This means I miss out on other stuff in regards to writing! Starting in January this year, I told myself that I would write a minimum of 250 words a day in some other story, and the first one I did was based lightly on an idea I had for a little RPG visual novel type game (which, coincidentally, is what Chester uses as assets for his project!).
Since it happened to involve a Minotaur, I figured this month is a good time to share it! So, here's a little story I wrote through January. My end goal is to write a handful of adult short stories like this and publish it as a collection one day. Definitely NSFW!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1viYn95CjcUZ47yASposQ_y-91ik1RZl7dMZDUQNFpco/edit?usp=sharing
Art done by my man, Wolfstar.
If you guys enjoy it, let me know. If you hate it, tell me why! I have a lot of work to do in regards to improving my writing, so all feedback is welcome. I've already moved from this one to another about a Werewolf, so I'll post that one when it's done, if there's interest in these.
Thanks everyone!
Comments
Haha, good good. I was hoping for that ;3
DyneWulf
2019-03-22 03:27:26 +0000 UTCThis one pushed some nice buttons! <3
Gaffgarion
2019-03-16 01:09:40 +0000 UTCHe looks so strong, damn...
Offshore - Adult Games Developer
2019-03-14 13:00:04 +0000 UTCWell thank you! I'm certainly rusty at this, but I'll keep doing it! And I'll be sure to read the next one better, to wipe out more of the errors x3
DyneWulf
2019-03-10 18:12:07 +0000 UTCThank you!
DyneWulf
2019-03-10 18:11:17 +0000 UTCAwesome to hear, hahaha. Thank you for the feedback! (I suppose that is an accomplishment too! x3)
DyneWulf
2019-03-10 18:11:13 +0000 UTCIt was very well written indeed. There were a few errors here and there, mild spelling and grammar issues, but the story flowed nicely. Your writing shines through as it does in Extracurricular Activities. As a writer myself I can relate to not writing much and needing to keep at it. The thing is, it's like riding a horse. You need to keep at it, exercising the muscles or you'll get stiff. Keep up the excellent work!!
jay
2019-03-07 20:58:42 +0000 UTCReally loved that story.
Jim
2019-03-07 18:29:56 +0000 UTCI loved this! Honestly I wanted more! You add enough details that I felt like I was experiencing the labyrinth but not too much to where I was bored. The sex scene was very hot and the magical bath was a perfect touch. I got hard so mission accomplished right!? π
CosmicNoodle
2019-03-07 11:19:53 +0000 UTCThank you for the feedback on that! To be honest, I just intended to write smut, buuuut in the process of writing all of this, it made me want to do more with the characters, and I might have gone a little overboard at times >.>
DyneWulf
2019-03-07 07:35:07 +0000 UTCHaha, a couple of you have mentioned spelling, so I must have stuck to my usual standards there! At least I'm consistent ;3
DyneWulf
2019-03-07 07:33:21 +0000 UTCA bath like that would be great, especially if it comes with a minotaur ;3
DyneWulf
2019-03-07 07:32:57 +0000 UTCCertainly! I think we can all say we are jealous here... Hahaha
DyneWulf
2019-03-07 07:32:36 +0000 UTCThank you. I'll certainly do my best to bring more x3
DyneWulf
2019-03-07 07:32:22 +0000 UTCHahaha, thank you!
DyneWulf
2019-03-07 07:32:04 +0000 UTCI'll definitely share more then! It's not something I've gotten to do much of lately, but I'll certainly do more.
DyneWulf
2019-03-07 07:31:45 +0000 UTCThank you, glad to hear it!
DyneWulf
2019-03-07 07:31:09 +0000 UTCWouldn't be an original without errors from me, huh? x3 Glad you enjoyed it though!
DyneWulf
2019-03-07 07:31:01 +0000 UTCAlways enjoy your work. Spelling aside isn't that big a deal with me so much until the final product.
Lord Memnar
2019-03-07 07:01:48 +0000 UTCI LOVE IT! i need me one of those baths XD
Davy Bogaerts
2019-03-07 06:16:29 +0000 UTCIt was good, honest opinion though, one thing I like about extra carricular is that it's not about the sex its about the relationship. So this leaves me wanting more of the in between, after they decide to get along and before it turns sexual. I know it's just a short story but it "felt" like it could have been more so the fact they get right to it disappointed me
timothy ballard
2019-03-07 04:36:51 +0000 UTCIβm so jealous, why canβt I have a Minotaur lover. This was very interesting and I would like more please and thank you.
Funnyguy1995
2019-03-07 02:47:19 +0000 UTChaha, hot dayum!!! I need more of this in my life <3 Really great story!
Macavity1103
2019-03-07 02:07:50 +0000 UTChmm i don't have any issues with the story, wording or pacing. i was hooked from start to finish 10/10 Just super jealous reading all of that wishing it were me as i scrolled with one hand >:P can't wait for the werewolf story next :3
Hyou Vizer
2019-03-07 01:54:58 +0000 UTCReally good story tho, would like some stories like this from time to time, nsfw or sfw
2019-03-07 01:44:32 +0000 UTCI love it! Its not to cheesy and just the right amount of sexy. Can't wait for the werewolf one now.
Damion Andrew
2019-03-07 01:14:38 +0000 UTCI LOVED IT!! Despite some spelling errors, it was very well written! Thank you for this wonderful surprise!!!
Brian Damiani
2019-03-07 01:13:51 +0000 UTC
