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Your opinion is importante for the Next Comic

Hello people, to those of you who have read A Night with Loona comic complete. I would like to know your general and specific opinion so I don't make the same mistakes in the next comic.   It could be some dialogue that could have been better, or page, or complete sequence.   Be honest and respectful, I'll be reading :D Thanks.

Comments

maybe a pregnant Loona from the first time he came in her

MrWolf

This. Please dear god this SO MUCH.

Aaron Jackson

I've enjoyed everything that the first comic gave us, but if there's one thing I want in the next one is MULTIPLE creampies. Really dive into the whole angle of her not only being in heat but how Moxie can go more than once. Maybe Loona awakened his libido and he can REALLY give it to her.

Aaron Jackson

If this happens, when you made a Milf Loona, might we see a comic of Loona turned into a Milf in your future comic?

Krishna Dudhee

Maybe a public scene where they screw each other through an open window. We see her stick her head out of one whilst in the car, and we missed out on anything happening then. Most of the camera angles also have her face visible in the frame, would be cool if we could see more of the back of her head. The camera could also be positioned further away in a scene to make the audience feel they are bystanders.

Ethan Templeman

I don’t rlly read comics that much but I rlly liked this one, u rlly captured Loona’s and M’s personalities. it was rlly well done, the juices weren’t overkill which I like. The speech bubbles weren’t in the way of anything, and each panel had next to no writing so u can rlly focus on the good stuff😉. I would like to see in the next part is maybe a good face fudge but other then that keep going I’m liking what I’m seeing

Aiden Skilling

OK, 1st, loved Sol, and would love to see more of her. The "second go" while coffee is being made seems a bit overboard. We had 1 burst through the door we didn't need a second. The rest was great. Artwork was perfect. For the future, Millie finds outs out, ties up L and M then fucks Blitzo or Vortex, as they listen in the other room. Loona is crying about being lonely (drunk) Millie tries to cheer her up. They fuck, strap-on that is used on Mox. Mil is said that Mox cant fuck anyone, because his big dick. She recommended Loona. After it all done, she tells never fuck behind my back again.

Jeffrey G H

Yes Millie takes the strap-on to Loona.

Jeffrey G H

Love the comic and I would like to see a continuation with Millie or something new with either Octavia, Verosika and Blitzo, or Blitzo's sister.

Xirtedak

I loved the comic. The only opinion I really have for the next one is more of a personal preference I guess. Where sometimes I found some of the sequences in the sex scenes a little too abridged. By that I mean to show more parts of each action.

aginioodwigom

Personally, I really enjoyed pretty much everything going on here, but if I had to make a pick, though I could be off from the majority here I'd love to see Millie looped in in some way. The premise is that she can't take Moxxie, but I feel like it might be exciting to see her actually try.

Dawsen

Superb comic really love the L+M ship however while I know I will be in the extreme minority for this. I would like for moxxie to show some guilt over cheating on his wife. Maybe next comic he decides to get extra loving with her. Overall probably the best comic so far in this fandom.

Sir_Filthy

personally I thought it was fine for a hentai. you told the story you wanted, the artwork was very good, and there was a "character arc" between all three characters.

TheLoadingCrew

Story wise, really enjoyed how the overall plot was going. My only issue was the lack of Blitz being somewhat involved in the story to create more tension on Loona’s side just like Moxxie is hiding his secret from Millie. Also you could potentially use the Grimoire to alter either Mox or Loonie 👀. Other than that really excited to see what you’ve got going for the sequel!

ThisnameisBS

what if loona gets pregnant

calamazo mcdonald

More Femdom tones would be nice I think! Sneaky sex also too would be pretty fun for the sequel, like when Moxie was on the phone with Millie in the hotel, that was quality!

Someone

Hmm really only thing I thought that stood out was moxxies cock was a bit inconsistently sized, specifically the last little fuck they have when Millie is in the other room

tet perker

Honestly the idea that millie cant have sex him her husband and allows him to bang other girls as long as she is with him to enjoy the show would be an interesting take. Even more so since Millie is EXTREMLY supportive of her husband. Bonus points for her watching Moxie putting Loona in her place and while Loona turns into a bitch in heat. Basicly revenge fucking her in Millies stead and Millie asking Loona if she still wants to mock her husband and if she enjoys beeing a whole for his fat cock. All behind blitzos back naturaly because daddy probaly hates the ideas that his employees constantly rail his cuty little daughter. T...too much?

Shadowkiller44

I loved it alot please make another loona comic

Fjdj Fjfkd

The comic was great liked the dialogue but really liked how the characters stayed true to how they usually behave in the actual show. Only constructive feedback I’d say is maybe longer scenes and keep deepening the story great job!

Demented

The comic was amazing. Only one piece of personal feedback: please add anal to the next comic — preferably Loona getting it from Moxxie. 🙃

Vesper

- The dialogue was mostly good but it did seem somewhat translated at times - I know it wasn't the main focus but Millie's storyline lacked conclusion; I would have liked to see it end with her no longer suspicious - The climax at page 51 leaves the resolution of the comic taking just a little too long at about 30 pages; it took about 15 pages to get going, I think it can take about 15 pages to wrap up - Just a personal preference: the bondage stuff was hot, wish there was more of it

Metro633

Night with Loona was very cute! I loved all the goofier moments and the expressions were sooooo good~ Personally I would love to see some solo Loona play, some Loona X Sol and...I might be a bit of an outlier here...but some more kink play~ Bondage, omorashi/pee, toys...that kinda stuff~ Overall really well done and I'm looking forward to the next one!

EtchyFox

It was a beautiful story and very well done I would love to see a Millie scene were she trys to have sex with moxxie and a dive into that side as well and building on loonas journey of emotional growth and moxxies struggle to figure out his stance on his relationship with Millie pluse would love to see some loona and moxxie haveing sex every second they can out in town or loona sneaking up to Earth to blow him in some crazy places maby with Millie near bye but over all you are the only person on Patreon I pay for I absolutely love your art style and story telling it's just amazing 😊

Bill will

All in all great story. I've loved to watch the subtle improvements over time between the earliest pages and the ends of the comic. Noticeable advancements and improvements in art style and direction etc. You can definitely see 2 years of progress in this comic. Proud of you! For the next comic, I'd be equally happy if moxie fucks Sol (a day with sol?) Or it turns out Sol is trans and she fucks Millie because she actually fits and we get a "fair is fair" plot resolution (maybe even have angry/reminiscing sol/luna fucking)

Senna Luna

I lowkey was hoping for a plot twist that millie was mad not because they fucked but because they didn't invite her. I mean it IS hell. No reason to be prudish about monogamy/polyamory

Senna Luna

Honestly I loved the story so far, not sure how far Sol would go in terms of making things difficult for Loona, but seeing the dynamic of Moxxie/Loona doing things around Millie being around or away is quite great! Hoping to see more and can't wait!

Wolfipoo

I personally liked Sol tho it seemed like she was just thrown in. The two voyeur imps was a bit more natural idk what everyone else is on about them being perverted and filming people fucking in their rooms actually seems like something that would happen at a Love Hotel in Hell. As for me personally would love to see a sequel to this where Millie finds out but instead of joining or trying to get revenge on Loona an Moxxie there's a twist and that twist being it turns out she's a Cuckquean and actually enjoys watching Moxxie wreck Loona which could lead to Millie being impaled on Moxxie's meat for the first time after getting caught watching.

SmilinLeviathan

Overall, great story. The ending felt a bit rushed. The B plot of Millie possibly finding out about the affair was riveting. But the whole thing did feel like it ended too well and quick. I appreciate the prospect of Sol being an issue in the future, but i was kind of hoping for a love triangle thing.

Jeff Broderick

this may be my personal taste, but I would prefer it if the affair keeps going behinds millies back, like hotdog89 stated.

Gamernist

Dialogue was good, more focus on the Marquis characters would be better

Tab

Noooo, there were very few mistakes. The only thing I'm a bit concerned about though is that cliffhanger we were left on. Your dialogue was perfect😊

Zenko

Gonna throw this one out there, it is Canon that Millie pegs Moxxie. I would have loved to see something alluding to that show up in aNwL. Maybe for a laugh or maybe for obvious reasons.

Eskimo992

Millie still suspects, it would be nice if she got more proactive and tried to seduce Moxxie back to her. At the same time, a montage of Loona and Moxxie fucking behind her back during missions or in their daily lives would offer opportunities for varied sexy situations. Also, does Blitzo catch on? He might be an even bigger threat to their secret than Millie.

HotDog89

I think it would be hot to see Loona try to deal with her urges towards Moxxie while trying to skirt around Millie.

KitFoxV

I'd like the story to continue the intrigue is juicer.

Valiant_bird

I absolutely loved both the drawings and the story. Maybe I would have given a little more space to key secondary characters like Sol, but being a non-canon character, you can't "embroider" too much on it, to avoid going into conflict with the canonicity of Vivienne's characters 😉

Petardo238

I didn't really have problems with the story. Would I have liked for Moxxie to Hook Loona into one of the Contraptions in the room? YES. But that's personal taste.

Mr.Maple

Yeah that would’ve been good like if when Millie finally found them and seen some drop of cum from it

Antonio

This is an interesting point for me, I confess I briefly lost interest in the comic during the whole section with Sol and the two voyeur imps when it was coming out because it was a bit *bleh* to wait a month to get a page of the lore stuff THEY'RE doing, not the lewd stuff Mox and Loona are getting up to, but now we've got the whole comic I've softened on it a bit and I do like Sol's design and the idea of Loona having this friend(?) from back in the pound. Like the person I'm replying to, I'd personally *prefer* an exclusive focus on the canon characters in this case, but I'm not against OCs being in it so long as they don't take up a few months' worth of pages :P Having said that though I looooved pretty much all the rest of the comic, the horny bat scene cracked me up and there's a few particular panels that REALLY got to me, like that one panel where it's just Loona's cheeks from the front with the underside of Moxxie's big ol' dick filling her puss? GUH amazing lol

MoorsheadFalling

I generally don't care about OC's yours don't really match the tone of the show. Please only put them in if you believe it's absolutely necessary.

Fortunekuger

You know perhaps I'm in the minority here (I haven't read all the other comments yet) but I'd actually like to see Moxie and Millie (and Loona) eventually work something out where they're all on the same page

Stoker Bramwell

I really like the comic it has great quality I can't wait for the new issue to come out

Pro Mecha

I really love the comic. I think Loona should have no gloves, no stockings, just completely naked, a threesome with M&M, and getting anal in the next one.

Cyber Phantom

I did like the comic, tho I can tell when the second comic comes out loona and moxie will be at it like nothing happen, and that hard drive is something id put primarily center focus as well with Mille starting to catch on more than she already does, and a few twists involving blitz might cause for something interesting

Mr.Hans

i luv this comic !! i do not have any complains bout ii , i just wanna see new chapters c:

Alvaro Jahir Flores Garcia

This isn't much help, but I loved it all, no notes

Phaser

Same here 👍

Kyubi Sarutobi

10/10. I started a patreon account just to get to see this comic

Cynical_medic

1st: Glad you took to the QnA idea :) 2nd: your story, art style, and process of teaser with a follow up full release of each panel is perfect. I really loved the story with a good balance of spice. 10/10 in terms of material. Overall the only actual issue is just me being impatient waiting for the next panel lol. Do you want you think is best because clearly it's working 👌

Josias Hernandez

Not to make the comic more difficult to write, but I’d like to see more characters like Tex, Blitz, and Verosika. Not in an orgy, but breaks in the story that add to the world building.

Terminaldogma01

I think it was very well balanced with Story and Saucy-ness. A nitpick would be that it dragged a little towards the end after the hotel but perhaps breaking the comic into two parts could've helped?

WhetWateR96

In all honesty it seemed really well done and almost nothing I can think of. Most people have personal opinions of what they want to see rather than what is actually wrong with the comic. I think it was perfect in all manner. It is balanced between lewd and dialog. Good transitions. Only thing I can think of is maybe make extra frames for some of the scenes. I noticed a lot of the scenes were only a single page before instantly switching to a different scene. Maybe stick with the same scene for 2 pages instead of just 1. Fill it however you like. A different angle or same angle with more dialog. However. And a personal request is make more short animations like the moxie one. Even the short ones are enjoyable. Lewd or not doesnt matter. Keep up the good work! You should be proud of yourself.

DMAN

i think its a good idea make loona cant stop to do it whit mox so the question here is what rol have the other girl in the story and if mox stay having sex are how much they hide from millie?

Talon

It was perfect in story and intimacy. Plus the cliffhanger’s were spot on

Joseph Mcclam

More nudity

Darius VanHorn

I would love for a threesome to be a thing but then that ruins the taboo of cheating. I would love a continuation of the sol story line. It adds a good drama b plot to the normal sex and drama a plot. I know Millie would be a freak in the sheets if given the chance (maybe some magic to allow her to be able to take Moxie and be mega horny to allow for a threesome that she forgets after)

Ethan Groberg

I honestly loved how you kept me on the edge while reading this and still enjoy the NSFW content as the story goes. Keep it up in the next project. I’ll be waiting 😁

CliffNoir329

The only thing I can think of is having more sex and freakier sex. It's practically perfect already.😅

Scott, Spiral Bro

God tier comic, I was always eagerly waiting for the next installment! Only thing I would have wished for was maybe moxxie giving loona some good oral clean-up by eating her out at the end.

LaserSquid

I loved the comic overall and believe that it is something to be proud of, due to the amount of effort and passion put into it. While there are a few things that I myself may have done differently, it would solely be due to preferences on my own part, and not because anything was bad or lacking. I look foward to future works from you

Cronozome

Loved the whole thing! Great artwork. I know I'd like for them to be a three way pairing (The M&Ms are too damn good a couple to separate them but Loona is too amazing to leave out) it'd be nice to see them work something out.

Nuka Man

Absolutely phenomenal comic. Maybe some anal and some more deepthroat.

Nightmare4150

Luna Under table, sucking his cock, while he has to keep his face normal in front of Mille. Remote controlled vibrators, controlled by each other and they have to suffer silently throughout the day. Then at the end of the day, Luna gives the remote control to the vibrator to mox and says to keep using it always.

Undead Writer

Yeah no real issues over here overall, all of it was amazing. I mean I guess if I DID have to say something, just minor attention to detail things, and I suppose, this is just me being me, but maybe add some pages just with the sex, like no dialogue?¿ and I mean apart from the things like “oh, ah, yes, fuck, etc.” again… that’s just me…

Tay Vader

Your comic was amazing and I enjoyed everything. The setting up your OC was perfect. My only input is a selfish one. I'd love to see more cum on tits. Lol.

Joshua Wayman

My only problem is that monies dick seemed to get nerfed And I would have loved to see a facial finish

TheQuietGamer

Could use some Millie involvement if she and Moxxie aren't able to have sex maybe Loona can help

jmt335

Maybe add some tickling. There are a lot of Luna fans who like tickling. Apparently it’s cannon that she has ticklish pads. Maybe go with something like that? I think there was a rumor going around that said she liked being tickled or something.

Undead Writer

The story telling in phenomenal. It was a little awkward though in the beginning when they were in the van driving back and Moxie out of no where mentioned the problems him and Millie have. Like there was some missing dialogue that could of helped made that less weird.

Evicorator

It has my 100% stamp of approval I do hope you plan on doing another comic maybe even a continuation of this one I feel like it would be amazing but it’s completely up to you but yeah you did an amazing job on this 😇

THEIRONLORD

I enjoyed the whole comic and am just waiting to see what ideas you have and get from the others here, keep up the amazing work and have an amazing day.

Sarahfailz

Agreed lol

ThiccThanos

As a fan base writer myself I found a story to be absolutely amazing well put together I do feel like you were missing a couple key elements like...mostly it did feel like there was an lack of other characters in the story plus little to no side storytelling that would fit in the story itself. But however I do got to say sex scenes 10/10 the environment 10/10 detail 8/10 (like I explained before) but overall amazing job in the future I personally would like to see more characters and more conversations that are going on and add a little bit more plot twists to it. If you have any further questions you can always direct message me if you have any further questions. But I hope this is helpful and I hope you you take this in consideration again this is my opinion. Have a fantastic rest of the day.

Oneeyebandit121

No problems from me loved the whole comic was Perfectly Balanced as all things should be

ThiccThanos

Loved 99% of it, that 1%, not enough butt stuff. I know, not everybodys thing, but me, gotta have my butt stuff. The rest I thoroughly enjoyed!

PossiblyKinky

Loved the NWL series and the art, some dialogue felt a bit forced but outside of that I wouldn't have changed a thing. If more is to be coming later on I'd love to see more interaction between Loona Moxxie and Millie as a developing throuple slowly finding what works for everyone in the new dynamic. But again that's just my opinion and possible my own weird ship behind that. Either way love the series and your work, keep at it.

Ryan Henderson

I just want more very lewd NSFW moments & to see more of Sol

VulpisPomf

I'll be honest. I liked alot of your comic. The art style is pleasant and it has some story to it. As far as I'm concerned. If there's more sexual scenes in any upcoming comics I'd definitely advise trying to maybe keep positions not too static and the dialog not repeating what you've already done. And you did good on that in "A night with loona." But I also don't mind if you want to take time from that and build on the story some more. Just don't be too edgy is all I ask.

OSTR1CHBO1

Just keep up the good work love your art

Bobby Mills

Maybe in the future Moxie could be craving some Loonussy perhaps some sneaky seggs or a beach episode like all animes add. Regardless tho whatever it might be if its ur artwork it’ll be a banger for sure

ItsGhosty

Same! If I could, I’d pay Jizoku so much to see a NW a Stella, Verosika, and any of the hazbin ladies with different scenarios and such!

Dannyboi

I enjoyed the comic. I'm only a little disappointed page 49 didn't lead to a WS scene XD beyond that it was nice.

Aether

I would like to see more of moxie giving loona or sol creampies. Honestly any moxie dubs and wins for him are always appreciated. Especially since he can't really have sex any other way, seems very sad that he can't put his member to use that much.

Browser10

Honestly, I didn't have any problems with the NWL comic. I really loved the shipping of Loona X Moxxie, and every page and sequence between the two. Keep up the good work and I can't wait to see more Loona and Moxxie moments in the distant future (maybe feature a preggo Loona if that's okay or not, just a thought).❤️‍🔥𖤐⛓🐺🐾☪💯👍

Kyubi Sarutobi

It was good overall. 10 out of 10.

Strawman

The only thing I could possibly say is some of the dialogue. Forgive me for sounding nit picky but there was only one word or two that I don’t think loona would say. But that’s all!! I LOVE the comic so much that I’m genuinely more excited for new pages than helluva boss episodes!!👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻

Dannyboi

The comic is amazing I’ve loved everything, I really enjoyed when Moxie snapped and took control I’d like to see more of Moxie being dominant on Loona

SilentFox19

The Night with Loona comic was magnificent. The best Hazbin/Helluva comic to date. Would love to see something similar with a Vaggie/Angel comic. Or maybe a Verosika/Moxxie comic would be awesome!

David Lobefaro

Not enough Millie 😔

kn1fe91

The story flowed very well and the chemistry between both characters is great, the only suggestions I have is a couple grammar oddities where a comma was placed where it wasn't entirely needed. However it didn't change the meaning of the sentence for example; "Now we're even, Fatty!" works both with and without the comma, but if she was making a quick point she wouldn't need to take a pause between words unless she's yelling the last part.

Robo Fox

i enjoyed the entire comic. personally i enjoy longer comics overall. i can not wait to see where the next comic goes

vectors1

I think it was great and awsome!!

SkolldreadWolf00

Yeah, it felt like there wasn't enough time spent on the enjoyment of the creampie, just felt like there wasn't enough panels of it. I'd love to see everything moving into a secret dom/sub relationship, hiding it from Blitz as Millie and Moxxie Dom Loona. But that's just wishful thinking.

Typhus Moth

It's just my opinion, but I think the cliff hanger can improve in terms of choosing the right panel to end the comic, choosing the last words not as a simple episode ending (which is how I felt) but as a season ending But, I absolutely LOVED the entire comic, the above it's just an observation that I would've liked, but the rest of the comic it's absolutely magnificent.

ThisIsGoddamnNick

I loved the entire thing, though I will say that since Loona was in heat when Moxxie released then as these comics progress she may come to realize that her mid section is growing and then have her and Moxxie deal with the consequences of trying to keep that hush hush that he is the father, looking forward to the continuation of Loona and possibly Moxxie tracking down Sol if that is indeed the next course of action

Drillkiller

Honestly, I feel it was great, but keep doing you an I feel you got this! 🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

DBA

The ending confused the hell out of me. But very good comic, I enjoyed it alot

SirForgotten

Honestly 99% of the comic was gold but I feel like the ending was a bit thrown in there. It went from loona worrying about sol having a copy of the video to just her and moxie in the van smiling. All in all I think the ending was a bit rushed.

BlakeTheFerret

I loved the comic. You left it wide open to continue of course. So seeing Sol in the next comic to continue what happened in the first comic would be awesome. Also some more backstory on Sol would be great as well. Like where she came from, how well she knows Loona, and other stuff like how she got stuck working at that particular hotel.

Drake Lovedragon

Loved the comic, dialog was great, wanted to see more interactions at the end between Millie moxie and Lona also see with sol and why she had the other copy. But I’m sure you have plans for all that.

Dimensionz

I thought it was absolutely wonderful. Almost every page seemed to be a cliffhanger onto itself. Always just want to know what’s going to happen next. Keep it up please.

thevengeful1

I like the story alot, it was well made and written. I like the small comic relief (no puns intended) I would personally like to see maybe some of the new episode content included or hinted at. I agree with Orlando brown that max and his wife come into the scene (and my horny self says I wanna see a loona, moxie and millie 3way~) I can't wait for more.

Lavender Sandman

I will have to read it in one sitting, since I’ve only read it as each page was released. From what I remember it was pretty good. Will update my thoughts when I have time to read again. Thank you for your fantastic art and story.

lilJakePDX

Honestly this quick little moment for them was hot as a setup so I'm hoping that for future comics we might get a few slower moments to actually enjoy the feelings they get with each other. Kinda like the few last panels where Loona says "goodbye* to Moxie before Millie breaks the mug in the other room;p

Anthony

All in all, 9/10. Great art. Great narrative. Good story telling. Sexy as a hellhound. Only reason I'm not giving a 10 is because NTR is just not my cup of tea. But that's my hang up so please don't take it personally. I still got excited every time I saw a Patreon notification and I'll be waiting on pins and needles for the next one.

Auro

Let's say this is a comic of hell, so nothing you have to worry about, just one thing, try not to touch any political in the dialogue, it's easy to make the meme but hard to escape from it.

Jake

Only notes i have about NWL comic is some scenes could have a little slower pacing so we could really see the progression of some of the moments instead of just rushing to the next thing. Thats just my personal opinion it was still a 10/10 comic. Would absolutely love to see more Sol tho :3

Vono

This is definitely a personal thing, but I would love to see more bdsm stuff. Definitely would make the comic from a 10 to an 11

Jackpot4484

I percenally loved the comic and the story it was an amazing job in both art work and story

Jesus

I would love to see more of Sol. She was pretty cute

Evening_Gaze

No complaints

Memerk

Not much bro. Just needs a faster pace between pages. But that's me being a rapid fan boy so ignore me lol.

Mr.WarrenStwert

I loved the story and writing, but I do feel like more could have gotten done and been shown before the accident with Millie arouse.

Benjaminruler

When loona was creampied and then it was forgoten about. Like maybe showing it drip or mentioning it would be nice

CheezeManZ

I didn’t have any problem with it but I do wish we would have had a bit more dialogue over all

Timothy Mullins

Loved the comic! Also loved Sol would like to see more of her in the future.

Robert Bode

The comic was amazing. Art style and the plot was amazing.

Emily Keada

Too bee 100% honest I didn't find anything wrong with her comic....I loved every page an just the emotional an physical build up! 🥰

Jason (SinGage)

What about a comic of Millie & Moxxie hanging out?

Cast Bet

I really didn’t have any problems with it I loved that comic keep up the fantastic work

Jake Asmundson

I would love to see a chapter 2

SonicXFire1987

I personally wished there was more Millie reaction to finding out about moxxie and loona but that’s just me

Matthew Cole

Well, the story was magnificent by the way I like how you shipped Luna and Moxie. It was wonderful but I understand soul wants a piece of her sister somewhere and I’ll be nice if Max his wife we get in the mix as well even though I know it would not be as Cannon as people would like it to be but it be nice.

Orlando Brown


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