The lights
Added 2020-02-06 20:49:49 +0000 UTC
I didn't like how I drew the last chapter so I modified it
thanks for your patience and support
I hope you like these changes
Comments
it's all good.
NeshBearWorks
2020-02-12 03:07:51 +0000 UTCupps you’re right 😅😅
yinller
2020-02-12 02:53:03 +0000 UTCmonti holding Richie. his hand same as richie
NeshBearWorks
2020-02-12 02:52:25 +0000 UTCahhhhhh where
yinller
2020-02-12 01:53:14 +0000 UTCI didn't noticed but I saw a small error with monti hand. not sure if anyone noticed that.
NeshBearWorks
2020-02-12 01:52:02 +0000 UTCKEEP IT! GIVE ME MORE FEELS I liked the R18 ver but... I like this one more! Due to expression I need my tears to come out first then the Thrills! we building up dynamic! I like!
NeshBearWorks
2020-02-08 03:25:43 +0000 UTCI like a lot of the pages that were added, especially small details like the lighting implying the passage of time, a few extra conversations between characters. Just little things like Monti asking Debora to watch the kids longer or Monti explaining why he said "Not again" add a lot in various small ways to make it feel less rushed and jumping from scene to scene. Like the original was kind of the back bone of the story movement but the pages added in a way are like supports that make that more sturdy. Good choice to go back and add them.
Hunter
2020-02-07 06:07:16 +0000 UTCI thought this was a different story style than the regular version and R18 version. I like the new page ~ more expressions and emotions to express the character's psychology.
少郁 何
2020-02-07 04:57:48 +0000 UTCoh tell me the questions
yinller
2020-02-07 04:33:22 +0000 UTCNo matter how much you change and add stuff to the story I will always enjoy it. I'm not obsessed with the sex scenes like everyone else. That is just a bonus and it doesn't change my outlook on the story. I still have so many questions for this story.
Jerome Hancock
2020-02-07 04:03:44 +0000 UTCI really like the new pages! Great work
2020-02-07 00:02:39 +0000 UTCPeople here are obsessed with sex scenes it seems. :-) lol
TheGrimm85
2020-02-06 21:10:51 +0000 UTChahahah you must admit is funny
yinller
2020-02-06 21:07:39 +0000 UTCyeah the sex one is next just i need more time to work in that
yinller
2020-02-06 21:07:21 +0000 UTCAre you gonna add the sex scene or is this just like a rewrite for just before that?
Alex Talbain
2020-02-06 21:05:33 +0000 UTCIt was confusing at first, but now i understand. :-) I like the pages.
TheGrimm85
2020-02-06 20:58:47 +0000 UTC
