Script Page for Ch 3, Page 114

You're very welcome, Mickey. I'm so glad you're enjoying the behind-the-scenes peek. :)

Alex Woolfson

Yep. I agree. And that's why most of the time the actual word isn't needed there at all. :)

Alex Woolfson

I second the motion. NSFW pictures are delightful (and I would dearly love one of Commander at some point, if I may delicately express such a preference), but the thing that really gets my engine turning over is seeing your own creative process, dear sir, and that of your collaborators. Thank you for being willing to share it with us!

Mickey Phoenix

I have to say -- I thought that the absence of any SFX on panel 2 was fantastic. It made it seem, in all honesty, louder than any "KABOOM!!!!!" possibly could have -- as if our ears, like our hearts, were shocked into stillness by the violence of the blast. At least, that's how it read to me.

Mickey Phoenix

Yay! You're welcome, SSF! I wasn't sure if anybody would be interested in these, and I'm glad to hear that you are! :)

Alex Woolfson

This is my favorite part of the rewards so far. It's just so cool to see this piece of the process. Thanks, Alex.

You three have developed a great sense of balance.

Chris Dangerfield

I did wonder the same when I really looked at the way Vero intensified the color of the flames (or so it seemed to me) just around Sircea's body. It certainly felt intense.

Chris Dangerfield

Ha, I saw your answer to this question on the thumbnail page a minute after I asked -- but thanks for going into a little more detail! I think you made a great choice from a writer's perspective, since another graze from Kyle would have been repetitive. This is a definite leap forward for him, and fitting since he's so emotional at the moment.

In truth, it just felt right for the character and for the story. The reason I had that panel in the script at all was to show Kyle having success vs. The Platinum Priestess -- but since her cape was already burnt, it felt like a hair singe was just more of the same. To achieve the effect I was looking for, he needed to do some actual damage. It raises the stakes and will make the future pages (and scenes) stronger. It wasn't a story change per se -- because, as I said, this was supposed to be a moment of real victory -- but making this change did *clarify* what I was trying to achieve in terms of plot, stakes, and consequences. And based on my knowledge of his character, he'd be able to do it at this point.

Alex Woolfson

You're very welcome, Chris! :)

Alex Woolfson

I'm glad you think so, Stefan! And these are pages from later in the story, when I've already established things for Adam. The first pages of any new script I write usually contain a ton more detail. :)

Alex Woolfson

You're very welcome! Glad you like it! :)

Alex Woolfson

Exactly. The panel should ideally fit the sound effects. Or, said another way, as the writer I should have a very clear idea what kind of visual effect I'm looking for and how big an impact it's supposed to have, and so I should include sound effects to make that clear for the artist. :)

Alex Woolfson

Yay! Glad you find that fun! :)

Alex Woolfson

Glad you think so, Hours! :)

Alex Woolfson

Reading the scripts gives the comic a new depth! :)

Stefan

Or no...it looks a lot more severe than that on the page, and especially in comparison to the thumbnail. But it makes sense that details would change here and there as the page takes shape, and that's very interesting to see! Now I'm curious to know why you decided to make Kyle's strike that much more damaging (unless it's a spoiler, of course!)

It's so great to be able to see this part of the process, thank you! And -- Kyle's fire got her in her glorious mane, but does this mean she's not hurt? *hopeful*

this is really intereting to see :D I thought it's nice that you already decide on sfx, too! It totally makes sense in a way but I somehow thought those would be decided only after the panel is drawn so that it would fit but apparently the panel must fit the sfx I assume xD

Nadin Brokop

This is so awesome to look at. To see how it all comes together in your process.

H4rrisH4wk

This is really cool! :)

Hours Left

Glad you like seeing the process, Kendall! :)

Alex Woolfson

Very groovy to see script to thumbnails to pencils to finished art. thanks, Alex & co.!

KendallPB

Exactly. Those sound effects are mostly there for Adam's benefit, so he understands the impact I'm looking to achieve. A picture is worth a thousand words, but without the pictures, you need a few more words. ;)

Alex Woolfson

Cool to see the throught of how each panel should be, and while I like how we don't get loads of SFX added on the pages, I really like seeing them in word. Here they really add to help the page being formed with those few extra words :)

DanishWolf

Oh I love seeing this. Thanks.

Chris Dangerfield