Writing. Day 02.
Added 2015-09-10 11:35:43 +0000 UTCDay two of writing the non-story sex scenes for Iris. Trying to make sure that every moment with you spend with the girl is as memorable as possible.
Iris is an interesting character who is actually quite innocent in a lot of strange ways... and sometimes I have to give a good long thought to what she is going to say in this or that situation or how she will react to this or that action.
That is all I have to report for today.
On the personal note I am 100% back to normal after the whole food poisoning business. Not feeling nauseated is a bliss I shall never take for granted again.
Thank you for your patronage my kind overlords OTL...
Comments
Well damn ! I'm sorry if I spoiled anything...I'll admit I had to really force on my eyes to be able to read this page ! XD You are the one creating this awesome story, tou should be the judge on what is good to put in the game ans what's not...but just so you know, if you happen to put it in, like a simple hidden feature or something, I won't be disapointed =D
Klyts
2015-09-11 17:24:19 +0000 UTCHey man! Hope you still feeling better! please, take care, we need you healthy and happy!
Nikraria
2015-09-11 14:56:01 +0000 UTCEnemy assassins, growing increasingly desperate, once gave Akabur enough cyanide to kill an elephant. It made him belch. True story. Edit: damn thing submitted before I was ready. On a more serious note I'm glad to hear you're feeling better.
hdctbpal
2015-09-11 05:52:58 +0000 UTCYeah, that's what happens when you don't drink enough water on a liquid protein diet. Kidney gets all clogged up with the stuff, shuts down. That's right.
Joseph
2015-09-11 04:16:19 +0000 UTCWhen I read feedback like that I can't help but get a tiny bit worried that I would write this or that character a bit differently then people would expect me to and will leave some folks disappointed. And you are the second person to call this "non sex scenes". I hope it's just a typo, because I'm working on not related to the main story sex scenes (not non sex scenes). These can be triggered again and again right after Iris moves in with you so I'm calling them "non story" sex scenes... Yes, Iris lacks any coyness related to sex that a "regular" girl her age would have. She is well aware of her lack of femininity though. Being raised by her father among other thugs she was very surprised and almost disappointed to realize one day that she IS a girl. All that plus her interest in public sex and her father's inability to recognize her as a grown woman creates a whole whirl of emotions and thoughts in her head that I try to keep in mind every time it's her turn to speak. And even more so when it's about intimate things like just you and her in a room of your house... But, I think I somehow managed to do a good enough job with this. I need to refine some parts a bit more, but hopefully I will be completely done with the writing today^^
AKAMAN
2015-09-11 03:18:30 +0000 UTCA partial kidney failure? Man, that sounds serious. Glad you alright. But you wouldn't know what the good looks like without experiencing the bad, right? :)
AKAMAN
2015-09-11 03:07:30 +0000 UTCAn "uncle sex"? I was pretty sure that page was unreadable. How on earth did you...? Well, anyway I usually use left site of the notebook to write ideas and random phrases that work and I think could be used later. So it's not a part of the story just an idea. And you got it completely wrong too. In case I decide to use it later that's all I will be saying. I hope I'm not leaving you too disappointed but there will be no sex between Iris and her father or uncle. It may sound fun but would be way out of character for her.
AKAMAN
2015-09-11 03:06:16 +0000 UTCIt's a good thing you have to think a lot to see how Iris react. It's the sign you made a real character, not a puppet you only pull the strings. As a storyteller, I encourage you to continue this way and make the story as lively as possible. The reason why Iris taken particularly my heart (and I also have a crush for Azalea, Lola, and first, Jasmine) is she is so honest. Okay, would be strange for a robber and a killer but that's how I feel her. She had a simple youth : Slice a throat, take the loot and run for your life. In a way, I totally undertsand the term of innocence applicated to her. She is honest with sexuality too and it make the sex scenes with her enjoyable and joyous. And pervert even more. I hope to see all the characters becoming as dense as she is. You worked well for many of them but actually Iris look the more lively.... Hem... sorry... too long post. So just Yay for the non sex scenes and you are awesome Akabur !
Bearfoot
2015-09-10 17:50:13 +0000 UTCAfter experiencing partial kidney failure and acute appendicitis, I fully appreciate not being in pain.
Joseph
2015-09-10 17:20:02 +0000 UTCGood to know you're feeling better man, but...waiiiiiiiiiiiiit a minute here ! What the hell is that "Uncle sex" story about ?! Are there some Maslab family mischiefs I'm not aware of ?! If so...AWESOME ! I <3 U !
Klyts
2015-09-10 16:44:16 +0000 UTCHeh... My audience shares my tastes in such things. ^_^
AKAMAN
2015-09-10 16:07:22 +0000 UTCI shall, I shall...
AKAMAN
2015-09-10 16:06:23 +0000 UTCThank you, Dorago.
AKAMAN
2015-09-10 16:06:10 +0000 UTC^_^
AKAMAN
2015-09-10 16:05:51 +0000 UTCI bought breakfast from a sketchy pancake stand and at the afternoon had a meal at some Chinese food joint... By the nightfall I was already feeling very sick... So, one of those two gotta be...
AKAMAN
2015-09-10 16:05:38 +0000 UTCGlad you're back on your feet! Did you ever figure out what it was that gave you the food poisoning? Keep up the good work.
Gthetree
2015-09-10 14:55:24 +0000 UTCGood to hear you've healed mate!
Hank Rillek
2015-09-10 12:32:48 +0000 UTCIt's good to hear you are back to normal, and thank you for all your hard work, you get the support that you deserve :)
Dorago
2015-09-10 12:00:32 +0000 UTCThank for the update, our overlord. The non sex scene is needed so sex scenes are enhanced. Keep the good job .
Ace
2015-09-10 11:56:14 +0000 UTCGood to hear you are back to normal yeah I like games with story without it you might as well be watching porn
Vega Chaos
2015-09-10 11:41:50 +0000 UTC
