Script for Double Cross Chapter Three, Page 50
Added 2020-10-07 02:30:30 +0000 UTCThanks to hitting our ninth Milestone Goal, Patrons get to see my original script page now in addition to the regular updates.
Enjoy!
Comments
This is an even more effective presentation, and it is cool and fun to hear of how things work behind the scenes.
QueBijoux
2020-10-10 15:40:49 +0000 UTCThanks for such a full response! I love getting a sense of the process and what goes into your thinking when storytelling in his visual medium.
Malik M.L. Williams
2020-10-10 02:47:17 +0000 UTCAdam actually sent me a couple options in the thumbnails for this one, and the version with the wider shots (and closer to the original script) just didn't feel like it was right for this story. I knew the art would be great, but with wider shots, the story felt like it became "boys kissing in their underwear." And that both pushed my limits of what I felt comfortable with with our underage characters. And, just as importantly, it's not what the scene is supposed to be about. Keeping things close (and even moving "the camera" continually closer) felt, to me, like it kept this moment about their emotions and their emotional connection. Yes, there's a physical part to this teen romance. And, so long as it doesn't feel exploitative, I'm not going to shy away from that being part of the story, since that's celebrated in mainstream hetero teen romance and gay romance is just as worthy. But ultimately, this is about how much these two guys like each other. How right this feels to them. In spite of all the complications. That's what we needed to show. And by removing one panel, and keeping things close, I felt like that story was told much more clearly. I've been writing comics for over ten years. Usually, I'm able to get a sense for how something will play in terms of tone for when it will be drawn. But every now and then, I need to see something first. And that's one of the reasons we have such a rigorous thumbnail process. Good question. :)
Alex Woolfson
2020-10-10 01:21:54 +0000 UTCInteresting to see how this page went from a “push in” to a “pull out” series of frames, and from four to three. I’m curious about how you came to that decision. Was it a discussion with Adam? Did you just not like the feel of the original thumbnails? I love the final result, regardless.
Malik M.L. Williams
2020-10-07 04:10:18 +0000 UTC
