New Text Adventure! - Smoked Out
Added 2021-04-06 07:06:28 +0000 UTCFirst spanking text adventure of April! Your two stoner friends ditched you at the movies, and now you want to teach them a lesson...
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Nice short story, although only one set of choices lead to "good" ending. However, all "Seems like the pot smokers got the better of you. Better luck next time!" endings look unfinished, or are too abrupt. You simply do not end with first "CRACK!" sound, there should be a bit more (how long and how hard was the spanking for example or what happened to the three characters and their friendship in the following days). I found only three grammatical errors aside from the usual lack of empty space after triple dot. Your look closer at the long glass cylinder - you, not your Savannah is has her head back - is should not be there Your friend's exchange a slow glance - friends
Vítězslav Konečný
2021-04-06 15:15:39 +0000 UTC
