Lantern Fish Update
Added 2019-12-15 16:04:33 +0000 UTCLantern Fish update: Page 10-13
Here are the next 4 pages of my current project :)
I thought really long about how I could set up the story and the universe it takes place in and went with the good old 'explaining it upfront'^^" Might not be the most interesting way but it can be done with just a few pages^^ So bear with me.
I'm not 100% satisfied with the text yet so that might change.
Comments
Thank you very much^^ Yes, the correction help is still (and always will be) very apprechiated^^ and ... omg you are right XD Why did I write 'almost'? I don't know but thank you very much for telling me ;)
Zylk
2019-12-18 18:18:44 +0000 UTCYasss 😍👌👌 Loving it so far!! . (As for the grammar/technical part (if you’d like comments on that again; sorry if you didn’t ;v; ) the only thing I noticed is that you say the Lanternfish would do “almost anything” to protect their Lights, and then follow with “absolutely anything” => Because of the “contradictory” feel of these two expressions I’d personally remove the “almost” (as it leads you to think there is a limit they won’t cross, while the “absolutely” negates that possibility), especially to emphasize the death part that follows~ c: )
ShadowsOfADay
2019-12-16 23:41:12 +0000 UTC
