Trouble in Paradise Part 1
Added 2024-02-23 21:14:00 +0000 UTCHi guys! I hope you guys enjoyed part 10 of the Bet. This is going to be part 1 of the new story I wrote based on the theme you guys voted on.
The new story will be available for gold members earlier than silver members moving forward. But don’t worry it will normally just be one or two days ahead as of right now. Please provide any feedback for the theme and model in the comments. I hope you guys enjoy the new story and thank you for all the support!
Comments
Different story themes will take different amount of time to progress
John Proctor
2024-03-31 20:08:43 +0000 UTCThe bet 100% took to long
Joshua Alexander
2024-03-31 19:00:12 +0000 UTCYeah, The Bet takes way too long. Build-up is nice when you’re throwing entire series at once. However when we have to wait for days for each chapter, it would be nice for every one of them to have some sort of satisfying conclusion. Emotions, alcohol and setting can make very fast pace very realistic. And you know, as a wise man once said “Good story is like a good bowel movement: only really satisfying once it ends”.
Z
2024-02-24 06:06:08 +0000 UTCWell it depends on what you define as the good part. For some people it’s the build up. For some it’s the nude and sex scenes. I won’t purposely avoid advancing the story to prolong the end, but at the same time it needs to be somewhat realistic. I see stories where the jump to sex just happens out of nowhere and makes no sense. For reference, do you think the bet took too long to advance? Thanks for sharing feedback. That’s the only way I can know what I need to change moving forward
John Proctor
2024-02-24 03:20:15 +0000 UTCModel is fine, however I hope you’ll get to the good part sooner than before, since it seems like another extremely long set-up. Sex and even open cuckolding doesn’t need to be the end, since you can always escalate the story. Check out My Secret Wife or Slippery Slope for reference
Z
2024-02-24 02:52:10 +0000 UTC
