Extra extras
Added 2023-03-02 23:55:05 +0000 UTCAs I mentioned in the chapter I just dropped on Royal Road and Scribble Hub, I want to know what kind of extra side content you all might like to see. As I have said, I'm very new to Patreon and writing with the support of people like yourselves, but I have a brain full of ideas and the free time to wield them in an unwise manner and thus this poll is created.
I will say, however, that these likely won't come until April at the earliest as I need to get my backlog up, and probably only once or twice a month based on creativity and inspiration. Since it's all going to be haphazard, I'm not charging anything extra, it's all going to be bonuses for the Regressor and Angel of the End tiers.
Please feel free to comment if you have anything you'd like to add that isn't an option, and thank you for supporting 100th Run!
Comments
I suggest an every man/person view. One of the things I think that can flush out your story more, show that people are not all a dumb mob.. Even going so far as going back in chapters to add some foreshadowing. For example… Chapter 9 Safari Hotel : some of the people he helped, question the contradiction he only agreed to help the women and children, his campiness almost like he wanted to be hated, that he gave them free advice before the tutorial, and how he gave up on the fight with Tommy so easily. Maybe the woman on the sundress with her kid, also as a women having the intuition to notice Kayla’s “acting” and reviewing his “harsh” words to be true. And instead of a blank “mob” show some realizing/theorizing that he choosing to be hated to unite them. Paladins are righteous but not dumb. Tommy should have hints of questioning himself for being too judgemental, especially when he cools off and hears contradictory information in front of him later from other areas… ie the people he first saved in the park and helped along the way. When people btw cities finally connect the dots the information from Etson then should not be all bad… just like in real life people are smarter than that. Not only the protagonist has gumption, smarts and can solve problems. Show perhaps Kayla masterminding resolving misunderstandings or making a big save. I hope these suggestions are useful as I enjoy your story. And for some feedback, I really like your pacing, how creative Anthony is. You cover all the bases in your world building. Your characters are consistent and smart. Finally, in the comments we had some who couldn’t look pass his emotional behaviour in “acting as the villain”, personally I think that is a particular group, but still, it’s good to consider… Create awareness & empathy : scenes of mothers/fathers protecting their kids with tenacity and partial loss. Show Emotional Struggle slightly earlier : him questioning or struggling with balance of caring versus not even more as his last run feeling so much more real.
Tin
2023-03-06 04:40:22 +0000 UTCGabrielle from right before/at the change but after anthony talked to her
Brian Czisny
2023-03-03 05:56:26 +0000 UTC
