Tifa Creamed on the Bar - Commission
Added 2020-07-11 16:34:06 +0000 UTCThis is a image type I was unfamiliar with called a "0 to 100" sketch where is goes from something simple and mundane too full bore fucking.
Nice to do something a little different ^_^ and hope you like it too!
Much love,
Director.
Comments
No problem, side note it was not my wording. mine would of been so much worse xD.
Firebox Studio
2020-07-11 18:38:07 +0000 UTCGreat images, as always. However, to be honest, I think the dialogue could use some work. It doesn't quite read well enough. E.g. 'Hold it!' is a little weak. And the second line could be a little easier to read. Try "That's your last drink tonight. I don't need you getting crazy again." It has the same meaning, but is easier to understand. as for "im cumming"; it feels like you could go a different direction. I don't mean to insult - I love your work. Just some constructive criticism. If you need inspriation for dialogue, I recommend 'The Cummoner' comic online. The dialogue is really well written. I love everything else about this commssion btw. Keep up the good work.
OuthaulDagger
2020-07-11 18:30:12 +0000 UTC
