Early version of August 6, 2017
Added 2017-08-09 17:52:28 +0000 UTCThis one does SOME things that I like, but it stumbled over some other things along the way and so I went with the simpler, final version: http://www.dumbingofage.com/2017/comic/book-7/04-the-do-list/secretly/
The biggest thing that jumped out to me is that, like, Billie and Ruth SHOULD be all too happy to be transparently aggro. They wouldn't deny it, and that they had to be coy about it in order to properly set up the punchline correctly didn't sit well with me.
Also, I kind of had to pull some things about Billie and Ruth to hate about each other (in the moment) out of my ass. I *do* like that all that Ruth needs, apparently, is a color scheme, but, alas, over all it was stretching too far to get to the goal.
(note: Ruth probably does not actually hate teal, canonically)
