Unused strips for November 26, 2024
Added 2024-11-26 14:36:57 +0000 UTCOriginally, Dina answered directly Joyce's misgendered outrage from the previous strip, aka "I can't believe you learned it first!!!!"
And it was fine! But then there's the autistic urge to over-explain, and so I took a second pass.
And that's indeed a lot of words! So much explaining. I should probably try to pare back the explaining.
Explaining partially abandoned... and also this strip, half-way through, before throwing up my hands. Look, when you have characters say "As you should very well know," that's a cue that we're saying things we already know. Sometimes necessary to respell things out for the audience, but...
No. I decided we deserved the Full Joyce:
There. Joyce voices her frustrations without anybody actually saying exactly word-for-word what they are, and also it's not seemingly solved in a conversation. Joyce still has those insecurities.
Gotta have some unresolved dramatic tension floating around. It can't all be instantaneous catharsis.
Comments
The final version is excellent, wonderful comedy
Eli Lebow
2024-11-30 05:51:45 +0000 UTCYeah , “the full Jocelyne” is a great line which deserves some more air, but the version which trusts that the audience can read between the lines and that the characters aren’t going to detail everything all at once feels more natural.
Wednesday
2024-11-29 15:57:36 +0000 UTC
