Deleted Scene from chapter 65: How to Melt Iron
Added 2021-09-24 23:25:32 +0000 UTCI didn't feel like this fit, so I removed it. From the Young Master of the Hermetic Iron Sect's POV.
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Tie Delun, Young Master of the Hermetic Iron Sect could feel the vein in his forehead bulging as he witnessed the slip of a girl insult his sect.
He would crush her for this insult, and injuring his junior so!
His eyes were fixed on the scene, remembering every blow, which he would make sure to strike in the same place! With his hammer! His Junior Brother was a fine, upstanding gentleman! To have him injured like this was beyond the pale
Finally, the little rat knocked his junior out of the arena, nodding her head as if satisfied.
He could contain his wrath no longer. He stormed into the arena from where he was supposed to remain. Some mortal started wo walk forwards to get into his way, but he ignored the man, marching right up to the cordoned off arena. His junior gave the necessary bow, and trudged back to their section.
“Worry not about this loss, junior brother. I shall repay her a hundred-fold for what she did!” He shouted.
His junior brother looked up.
He expected to see the look of failure on his junior brother’s face. A look of defeat.
Instead… he seemed pensive. He wasn’t even hurt.
“..she was telling me how to properly block her blows.” His junior stated, sounding mildly confused. “She said ‘this is boring, so lets trade pointers instead.’”
Delun paused.
“What?”
“She spent the entire time telling me that my blocking was inefficient, and that to properly disrupt a faster foe, I needed to have a looser stance. The second last hit, before she removed me from the arena… was the same as her first. I managed to block it.”
Delun replayed the fight in his mind. Indeed, most of her attacks had followed a pattern— a pattern that had been on purpose to give his junior something to see and block.
Some of his ire faded. It was still insulting, for a member of his sect to be toyed with like this!
“...is this true?” He asked the girl.
She cocked her head to the side, staring at his armour and hammer, all carved with the symbols of his sect. Before one worked iron, first they learned to engrave it. With ancient characters of power and protection.
“Yes! His carvings were quite pleasing, and though it was a boring fight, I decided to trade pointers with him. Perhaps next time, he will be a good fight.” Her eyes flicked all over his body, before settling on his face. She smiled. “Your freckles and muscles are quite pleasing! You remind me of my master! I hope to meet you in combat later, Handsome Man!”
Delun’s jaw dropped at her words.
“Ugly brute,”
“Dirty-face”
Those were common words directed at him. What woman called him handsome, with his brutish, oversized muscles, and the blemishes all over the bridge of his nose?
Rou Tigu smiled earnestly, brilliantly.
Tei Delun felt his heart leap to his throat, and his head span, as he stared at those yellow eyes.
At her own carefully sculpted muscles. She turned to leave, and his eyes followed her.
“Young Master? Young Master!”
Delun startled. “Ah, um, yes! Let us go, Junior Brother!”
The announcer was saying something, and sounding disappointed, but Delun was still in a daze.
“Handsome Man” “Good carvings”
....how did one court a woman again? His father said intricately worked metal was best....
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Yeah, just didn't feel right for some reason. But Tigu thinks Jin is handsome. so she called a man who looks a lot like him, in terms of muscle mass good looking, when said man has been constantly called a brute/barbarian.
Comments
I think it would have been great to be in the official chapter.
Testcase
2023-12-26 20:16:03 +0000 UTCThis is absolutely perfect
David Moore
2023-05-03 07:48:02 +0000 UTCThis is actually brilliant.
Red Viking
2021-09-28 01:25:45 +0000 UTCI love this deleted scene! But I do agree it wouldn’t match the flow of the chapter.
Calico C
2021-09-27 21:29:36 +0000 UTCimho even noncannon stuff is a fun/worthwhile add to the patreon. What-ifs, paths rejected, etc. Pls just be clear on labels or you'll have a lotta confuzled peeps :). And I agree, it can be a nice bit of bait to encourage/reward subscribers! :) Extras and chapters-in-adv are the two of the most common incentives folks use, I think?
fbt
2021-09-26 16:04:59 +0000 UTCThe awww was a physical force of nature
Bobby B.
2021-09-26 09:32:13 +0000 UTCIt already is. Read the his description by Go Rem
BRUNO ASTUR
2021-09-25 19:18:38 +0000 UTCI agree that the scene didn't fit the chapter, but it this is a very good way to try to improve your Patreon membership. Just make people know in your chapters that your Patreon have deleted scenes that, while canon, didn't make the cut for the chapter and post this little blurbs that may be used in as reference points for future scenes.
BRUNO ASTUR
2021-09-25 15:40:31 +0000 UTCMaybe work the reason Tigu is specifically calling him Handsome Man into the chapter? I think it gives good context.
Steven Howell
2021-09-25 15:20:46 +0000 UTCOr if he was there with his cart mountain to sell Jade Rice onigiri.
Bonifacio Mario Peña Jr.
2021-09-25 15:20:42 +0000 UTCwhile it did not fit the last chapter its still nice in a sort of mini interlope. Its allways nice to see the viewpoint from the other side.
Bookman
2021-09-25 14:51:27 +0000 UTCTrue. Also it would be funny if he suddenly showed up with a present for Tigu with no explanation when Jin is checking in on them during the tournament.
Kara Nina
2021-09-25 13:16:01 +0000 UTCI liked this, but I agree that will not fit with the chapter.
Guilherme Silva
2021-09-25 13:04:57 +0000 UTCI can see why you removed it. I think hinting what happened worked better for this chapter. Still, it was quite cute and I'd put it if (when) they face off in the main tournament.
Ivactheseeker
2021-09-25 12:13:32 +0000 UTCIt would bring me massive joy if his “family” found him as a “leader” of every sect of influence because he’s the master to all the children before they take over as sect leaders
FlawlessMovement
2021-09-25 10:31:36 +0000 UTCI think that this segment or something like it could play a good role in the main release. Alot of this story's charm lies in flipping expectations into nice, wholesome scenarios and seeing xianxia scenes through the lens of 'nice normal'. Tigu turning the initial rounds into free pointer sessions and Gou Ren being casually unimpressed by the cultivators were my favorite parts of v2c65.2. And I liked seeing Tie Delun coming at Tigu seeing her actions though the lens of cultivator culture, then blushing under her honest compliments. Its a very compact distillation of why I read this. I agree with other comments that that getting partial dialogue via lip reading was a little off. We could easily guess that Tigu would be disarmingly nice to Tie Delun, so the actual broken up text was low content and disrupted the pace. Suggestion? Cut out the actual narration of the arena dialogue by the brothers, just have Gou Ren make resigned and embarrassed comments on the obvious back and forth between Tie Delun and Tigu, and later have a Tie Delun POV set after the confrontation but before he gets called up for his first match that fills out some of what exactly was said, with him being slightly confused, somewhat ashamed at his behavior, and slightly wondering about girls. I get the feeling that Tie Dulun is the sort that needs some time for his mind to jump to thinking about Tigu as a girl, so this would give him more time to get over his surprise.
Market Pamphlet
2021-09-25 05:49:41 +0000 UTCIt is a very nice aside... I always enjoy the occasional outside points of view.
Eric Hicks
2021-09-25 05:47:08 +0000 UTCI’d rather pull the yun ren narration and replace it with a “whatks she doing? Look she’s instructing him!” convo. But maybe drop the courting bit at the end unless it’s gonna be a thing.
Matt DiMeo
2021-09-25 05:36:53 +0000 UTCThis was great! I understand keeping this separate though, it wouldn't have meshed with the chapter but I love it as a stand alone!
Chad Hagner
2021-09-25 02:51:26 +0000 UTCThis is hilarious I couldn't stop laughing
Luke Preston
2021-09-25 02:34:03 +0000 UTCI like it. You're probably right about it not fitting the chapter - the perspective shift would've probably been too sudden. From one unknown character to the next. Make it a whole separate chapter - a few months in the future he journeys to find Xiulan, everyone thinks he's in her sect to ask for her hand, but he just enquires about Tigu!
jaskij
2021-09-25 02:11:01 +0000 UTCenjoyed this. kinda hope a version of this is used later on .
Gary Hixenbaugh
2021-09-25 02:10:02 +0000 UTCYeah to second or third this adding it to the end after something like a page break would work
J Klugh
2021-09-25 01:54:41 +0000 UTCI like this deleted scene.
Jan Alexander
2021-09-25 01:53:34 +0000 UTCThat was delightful
Nigel Franklin
2021-09-25 01:37:14 +0000 UTCI think it should be added at the end of the chapter
John O'Connor
2021-09-25 01:31:41 +0000 UTCI liked this scene better than Yun Ren narrating parts of what is going on. This is especially true as his ability to read lips seems to come out of nowhere (and given Tigu would have been shouting and bouncing around should have been useless). and him needing to narrate things for his brother seemed very odd (granted this was made worse by the fact that I initially missed the fact he was reading lips and instead assumed he was able to hear parts of what was going on). The scene you used in the chapter was not bad, but it wasn't great either. This on the other hand, while I agree having a very different feel then the rest of the chapter, was a great scene and I'm really sorry you decided to cut it.
Michael Maor
2021-09-25 01:31:21 +0000 UTCI really like it, but I can see why it's removed. Maybe it will fit at the start of the next chapter.
Ask-if-I-like-lemons
2021-09-25 01:24:04 +0000 UTCPlease include this scene. It's so good. Please include this scene. The public deserves to feel validated for loving tigu
Toknightly
2021-09-25 01:16:35 +0000 UTCI like this chapter for the way it plays against the typical troupes of a handsome man in Xuanhuan novels. I also like the idea of this guy, at some point, showing up on the farm trying to court the cat/daughter of a "hidden master".
2021-09-25 01:09:43 +0000 UTCI’m not sure he needs a shotgun, since he can probably obliterate this entire city without breaking a sweat
Noah
2021-09-25 01:05:45 +0000 UTC"How does one court a woman again?"
Adam Rosenberg
2021-09-25 00:42:39 +0000 UTCYeah. Redundant. The way it was done in the chapter comunicated the same while also giving something to do for the boys in the spectator seats. Also having it a bit vague is always fun to have it later confirmed
Artur Vogt
2021-09-25 00:38:25 +0000 UTCIt definitly needs to be in the main chapter, good info here
TheLost
2021-09-25 00:28:35 +0000 UTCI agree, it most definitely belongs.
Eric
2021-09-25 00:19:36 +0000 UTCI second that.
Flover
2021-09-25 00:19:19 +0000 UTCOh this is perfect. It would have fit fine in the chapter. Tigu has a fan.
Len
2021-09-25 00:18:51 +0000 UTCCF will work this information in later another way if it's going to be relevant to where the story's going.
Termac
2021-09-25 00:02:27 +0000 UTCI would be 100% down for the next Arc after the tournament being a "Seven Brides for Seven Brother's" Arc as the disciples spirit away all the eligible young masters/mistresses in the Auzure Hills.
Stewart Boyatt
2021-09-24 23:56:34 +0000 UTCI think this should be offered to the readers outside the patron, even if you just unlock it to public and put the link in the ending author note on royal road when the OG chapter is released publicly
Aaron
2021-09-24 23:55:10 +0000 UTCI thought it was great. You could totally just add it at the end of the chapter, I know there is a little time overlap but I didn't mind that at all, it just fleshes out the story as seen by the brothers.
Grasenrack
2021-09-24 23:53:07 +0000 UTCHonestly, I liked this. Perhaps as a flashback in an interlude style chapter?
Teatime42
2021-09-24 23:50:27 +0000 UTCFuck me are you kidding that's adorable shes so innocent
BigBro Bluesman
2021-09-24 23:48:08 +0000 UTCI feel like this fit, and if anything makes the chapter better
AirSak2000
2021-09-24 23:42:23 +0000 UTCGreat as always
Donncha crowley
2021-09-24 23:41:44 +0000 UTCI like this. I was a little confused about what happened and who was who at the end of the chapter. This bit cleared up my confusion completely.
Buzz1089
2021-09-24 23:41:07 +0000 UTCI liked it. I hope it is or becomes canon.
William H
2021-09-24 23:39:24 +0000 UTCI really enjoyed this, shows Tigu’s aggressive honesty and innocence
Christopher Thomas
2021-09-24 23:39:07 +0000 UTCI like this scene a lot more than Yun and Gou watching the fight
BluEarth
2021-09-24 23:38:00 +0000 UTCThe wicked challenger in the dawn hour The hero comes to save his brother at the chill morning The villainess crushes them both at noon. The hero goes to an elder for sage advice and tea in the afternoon The advice softens the heroin's heart and she leaves at the weirding hour. The families meet at the crossroad as the sun sets. The fated meeting at the hot springs in the evening.
Arnon Parenti
2021-09-24 23:37:54 +0000 UTCThis absolutely feels like it should fit in the chapter.
Bunny Waffles
2021-09-24 23:35:34 +0000 UTCI think it would fit in great! I actually love this even more than the chapter
taukid
2021-09-24 23:35:17 +0000 UTCI liked it, it was cute.
Blacktide
2021-09-24 23:34:23 +0000 UTCThis would have been wonderful in there. A shame it's missing. I loved it :)
Ashlazaria
2021-09-24 23:32:54 +0000 UTCYeah I think this would definitely have fitted with the story^^
Vexdt
2021-09-24 23:32:27 +0000 UTCThat would have worked nicely I think. It flows well with what u have written from other perspectives and its amusing. Further, it gives you something to balance later cuz I have a feeling that snooty kid Jin knocked around is going to find Tigu to be someone he "should recruit for his sect". This could give the HI YM a visible reason to try to upset that process, which will surely cause great fun for Tigu and the boys.
WyldFyr3 Damon
2021-09-24 23:31:19 +0000 UTCSimple expand it and just make it its own chapter if you feel it fits the overall narrative and adds to the story.
Dale
2021-09-24 23:30:38 +0000 UTCThis is great! How dare you delete such a nice scene 😂, now I please upload all the others, what other gems have you been keeping from us!
RainyCats
2021-09-24 23:30:26 +0000 UTCThis is a whole 7 chapters arc
Arnon Parenti
2021-09-24 23:29:47 +0000 UTCJin should start rehearsing the Father speech. Who knows maybe he will even manage to a shotgun in time.
JohnZ
2021-09-24 23:29:10 +0000 UTCThis is great, even though it didn't work with the chapter.
Jonathan Shaw
2021-09-24 23:28:47 +0000 UTCOh, I hope this scene comes up later just so Tie has to interact with those around Tigu when he tries to court her.
Ironforge
2021-09-24 23:28:37 +0000 UTCMaybe next chapter, or as a flash back when Xulain "interrogates" him as the senior sister of Tigu?
Seadrake
2021-09-24 23:28:27 +0000 UTCOh no, he's likable How could you make another likable Young Master/Mistress? Now I want more 😩
Sassy
2021-09-24 23:28:24 +0000 UTCThis is wonderful.
Jonathan Brewster
2021-09-24 23:27:59 +0000 UTC
