Bodysuit 23 #527
Added 2020-07-16 01:39:07 +0000 UTCEdit 2: Okay. HERE's the final dialogue!
Edit: Cooper never came online today. Considering the time of year and his brief appearance online yesterday, just enough for a couple comments and then went offline, I assume he's in the middle of something or currently traveling.
RIP me I guess.
Red text is tentative.
What happened was the original dialogue exchange had Angela repeating herself in panels 1 and 4, albeit with somewhat different phrasing. Cooper pointed it out and I've spent a couple hours of reworking the exchange. With Cooper offline I have yet to run it by him to see what he thinks of this direction.
One issue is if I go with this, that means the next couple pages will need rewriting, along with looking ahead to later in the chapter to make sure everything plays out with this page in mind. Not only that, but it might change the tone for things down the road. It's all up in the air right now. There's a chance the dialogue might change tomorrow, so don't get too attached to it just yet.
Comments
lovely edit. flows better and makes a lot of sense.
Robert Sage
2020-07-19 23:15:33 +0000 UTCHaving a character who is known for being blunt can be a godsend when storytelling.
DezzieArts
2020-07-17 02:41:02 +0000 UTCInteresting. I personally feel it is great that Kev is having to look deep. even if in the end he feels she is being to harsh or is in some way wrong, this point of introspection is great. Personally I feel she is right. but she also does not fully understand the events that built to this. so she may be a bit to . . . blunt. but that seems to be her nature.
Sophia Clay
2020-07-16 05:29:48 +0000 UTCSo is he not going to explain that he never meant to befriend anyone as Doris, and that the name was made up on the spot because of that?
The One Hammer
2020-07-16 04:34:39 +0000 UTCShe is not lying. Its all true. Its all his fault.
Nicholas A Wagner
2020-07-16 02:39:00 +0000 UTCBased on the flashback events of a very early comic I find myself more invested than I'd anticipated in what direction you chose to take this. I've had a certain thought about Kevin's motivation for wearing the bodysuit. I'm curious to see if that thought pans out or it turns out to be something else entirely.
DezzieArts
2020-07-16 02:36:02 +0000 UTCaww she is roasting him. kinda feel bad for kevin but she's right haha.
Robert Sage
2020-07-16 02:08:04 +0000 UTC
