A huger game p1
Added 2016-06-17 02:41:07 +0000 UTC
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I thank you very much, I fixed them as you said. I will learn from my mistake.
EscapefromExpansion
2016-06-17 13:52:54 +0000 UTCIf I could help out with some of the dialogue, there's a few grammar mistakes. "Quiet, Natsu. You've been yelling that for three hours." "I can't shake off the memory of the last time we were here." "Don't worry, I'll beat anyone who gets in my way." "The last time we were here, we were frozen for seven years. How can I forget that?" "Natsu's food came out again!"
BioYuGi
2016-06-17 13:24:09 +0000 UTC
