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Re-Rendering 'Tim is a Fat, Delicious Man' tonight.

I need to fix a patron's name and change Dorrito to Dorito.

Any other fixes that you guys see fit, please let me know before midnight.

Thanks.

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Nice catches, dude. Thanks!

NeoCranium

You shouldn't put an apostrophe after "gonna", "kinda", "dunno", "gotta", and "wanna". At 8:11 you put "that the camera screams" instead of "that this camera screams". At 9:01 you put an apostrophe after "Marble Hornets" when it doesn't need it. At 19:50 you put "most enjoyed while" when it's "most enjoyable while". At 20:09 you put an apostrophe after "cause" when it should be before it. At 20:15 you put "when it is" when it's "when it's". At 35:07 the sentence should end with a question mark instead of a period. At 36:08 "where ever" should be "wherever" because of how it's used. At 37:48 "cause" should have an apostrophe before it. At 39:44 you put "Marble Hornet's" when it should be "Marble Hornets'". (Keep in mind, most of these are obviously ridiculously nit-picky. If you'd like I can go through and timestamp each use of "gonna", "kinda", etc. that has the incorrect apostrophe placement.)


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